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So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?

I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.

Ooh, I was planning a reread anyway, so why not!
(Disclaimer: I'm not sure how qualified I am to do this, though. The last time someone asked me to look over their work was... heavens... 8th grade peer editing, and that was not a terribly long time ago.)
Well, my dear sir, I can at least assure you that your writing is infinitely better than the average 8th grader's. I look forward to re-exploring the Realm with pleasure.

[Aierdome]

So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?

I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.

EDIT: See below for list of links.

I'll certainly read this. The titles and chapter titles are certainly attention-grabbing (in a good way). 

[OwlsG0]

Monstrously long link set (so spoilered):

Spoiler: deviantart links • show

S1: The Advent of the Sword
Between Then and Now
Mission Commission & Briefing
I Think I’d Better Think It Out Again
Striking at the Scowrers
One Step Forward, Two Steps Back
Defending the Inn Crowd
Mission Complete (I Hope)
Post-Mission Debriefing

S2: Realms Above
I’m Always on Tap
Giants Ahoy!
Another Branch or Two
A Summer Trap Springs at Winter’s Fall
It Can’t Get Worse!
It Got Worse
Wrapping Up, Going Down
Back to Mission Control

S3: The Ship/Shape/Span of the World, by a Spick
Mission Briefing
Storm and Board
The Tower at the End of the World
Here Be Dragons
The Boiling Seas
Gold Fever
The Voyage Continues
My Return

S4: The Undesired Princess & (You Guessed It!) the Enchanted Bunny
An Inventor’s Tale Retold
In Which I Am Indeed the Bunny
The Path I’d Trod Before
The Trial of Compassion
The Trial of Honesty
The Trial of Faith
A Witch Arises
Victory, Defeat & an Unavoidable Tragedy

How would you like to have any feedback we might have sent back to you? Google docs, or what?

[LooNEY_DAC]

How would you like to have any feedback we might have sent back to you? Google docs, or what?

I edited the OP to answer, but will say here: whatever you want.

[amaranthineamusement]

Hi! This is kind of a weird request, buuuuuuuuuuttt this is the writers corner, so.
I was wondering if anyone would be interested in reading & critiquing my novella? It's around 20,000 words. I can't pay you or anything (I have no money) so I totally understand if you don't want to! But there's only so much my mom will tell me because she's automatically biased It's fantasy with a gold rush twist.

Short summary:
Del Fetler's set off to make his fortune... mining for gold on the floating, magical isle of Cumulus. Despite his best efforts, however, he's soon entangled in a magical adventure that may result in the death of everyone on the island. Can he join forces with two strangers to defeat a witch with no conscience and an evil plan?

Let me know if you want to read it, I can give it to you in word or pdf format... I'll just need your email (or maybe I can send it in a message? I'll see).

[Mélusine]

It's not a weird request, we need readers to understand where are our strengths and weaknesses

[Ragnarok]

Hi! This is kind of a weird request, buuuuuuuuuuttt this is the writers corner, so.
I was wondering if anyone would be interested in reading & critiquing my novella? It's around 20,000 words. I can't pay you or anything (I have no money) so I totally understand if you don't want to! But there's only so much my mom will tell me because she's automatically biased It's fantasy with a gold rush twist.

Short summary:
Del Fetler's set off to make his fortune... mining for gold on the floating, magical isle of Cumulus. Despite his best efforts, however, he's soon entangled in a magical adventure that may result in the death of everyone on the island. Can he join forces with two strangers to defeat a witch with no conscience and an evil plan?

Let me know if you want to read it, I can give it to you in word or pdf format... I'll just need your email (or maybe I can send it in a message? I'll see).

Send it my way- I'll read when I have time. Word, please.
starwarssith54@gmail.com

[LooNEY_DAC]

Hi! This is kind of a weird request, buuuuuuuuuuttt this is the writers corner, so.
I was wondering if anyone would be interested in reading & critiquing my novella? It's around 20,000 words. I can't pay you or anything (I have no money) so I totally understand if you don't want to! But there's only so much my mom will tell me because she's automatically biased It's fantasy with a gold rush twist.

Short summary:
Del Fetler's set off to make his fortune... mining for gold on the floating, magical isle of Cumulus. Despite his best efforts, however, he's soon entangled in a magical adventure that may result in the death of everyone on the island. Can he join forces with two strangers to defeat a witch with no conscience and an evil plan?

Let me know if you want to read it, I can give it to you in word or pdf format... I'll just need your email (or maybe I can send it in a message? I'll see).

There's a little envelope next to the dA icon beneath my name. That should e-mail me. PM if you have trouble.

[LooNEY_DAC]

So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?

I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.

EDIT: See below for list of links.

2nd EDIT: As I said up top, you can respond by any means that are at your disposal, including but not limited to:
A post here (spoilered or unspoilered)
A comment on dA
A post on the Scriptorium
A Forum PM
A reply to the comment(s) on the SSSS page
A link on any of the above to a google doc

Monstrously long link set (so spoilered):

Spoiler: deviantart links • show

S1: The Advent of the Sword
Between Then and Now
Mission Commission & Briefing
I Think I’d Better Think It Out Again
Striking at the Scowrers
One Step Forward, Two Steps Back
Defending the Inn Crowd
Mission Complete (I Hope)
Post-Mission Debriefing

S2: Realms Above
I’m Always on Tap
Giants Ahoy!
Another Branch or Two
A Summer Trap Springs at Winter’s Fall
It Can’t Get Worse!
It Got Worse
Wrapping Up, Going Down
Back to Mission Control

S3: The Ship/Shape/Span of the World, by a Spick
Mission Briefing
Storm and Board
The Tower at the End of the World
Here Be Dragons
The Boiling Seas
Gold Fever
The Voyage Continues
My Return

S4: The Undesired Princess & (You Guessed It!) the Enchanted Bunny
An Inventor’s Tale Retold
In Which I Am Indeed the Bunny
The Path I’d Trod Before
The Trial of Compassion
The Trial of Honesty
The Trial of Faith
A Witch Arises
Victory, Defeat & an Unavoidable Tragedy

Just bumping this up to keep it in view. (I know: you're all busy people et cetera; I just wanted to gently remind people.)

[Lazy8]

So here's a kind-of crazy idea that just started stewing in my head at random while I was out walking today: a world where once people have reached adulthood they don't actually start aging until they have children, and each subsequent child speeds up the aging process. I was vacillating on whether this would be more interesting if applied to everybody, or only to women/people capable of giving birth, with everybody else just aging normally.

This is the sort of setting where I could see the story being either really interesting and thought-provoking, or horribly, disastrously wrong. Thoughts?

(Also, the Curse of Original Fiction strikes again.

• Worldbuilding
• Characters
• Plot

You can only choose one. *headdesk*)

[LooNEY_DAC]

So here's a kind-of crazy idea that just started stewing in my head at random while I was out walking today: a world where once people have reached adulthood they don't actually start aging until they have children, and each subsequent child speeds up the aging process. I was vacillating on whether this would be more interesting if applied to everybody, or only to women/people capable of giving birth, with everybody else just aging normally.

This is the sort of setting where I could see the story being either really interesting and thought-provoking, or horribly, disastrously wrong. Thoughts?

There are those who would say that they themselves didn't start aging until they became parents…

(Also, the Curse of Original Fiction strikes again.

• Worldbuilding
• Characters
• Plot

You can only choose one. *headdesk*)

…and there are those who would dispute that last with great ardor (including me--though that may be why I write so slowly).

[Lazy8]

…and there are those who would dispute that last with great ardor (including me--though that may be why I write so slowly).

No no no, I was referring to my writing specifically. Which is probably why I've stuck mostly to fanfiction lately, because I can only ever seem to come up with one.

[LooNEY_DAC]

No no no, I was referring to my writing specifically. Which is probably why I've stuck mostly to fanfiction lately, because I can only ever seem to come up with one.

Random thoughts…

It's probably why sequels/side stories are popular, because most of the work is done already. An example of my own is my most recent thing: it's a side story in my Big Future History of Everything, so the setting was already there, and I just had to plop the characters and plotline into it.

This leads to my next asinine idea: why not do each bit separately, and try them in various combinations until you find something that works? Like, create thirty worlds, thirty plots, and thirty sets of characters, and see if you can't get at least one full-fledged story out of them? And the settings, plots and characters that you don't use now can be picked up and dusted off once you find or make the other elements to fit--writing is patient that way. My Big Future History of Everything has been slowly evolving in my mind for maybe twenty years now, and will wait another twenty for me to use it.

Just me rambling a bit here.

[Lazy8]

Random thoughts…

It's probably why sequels/side stories are popular, because most of the work is done already. An example of my own is my most recent thing: it's a side story in my Big Future History of Everything, so the setting was already there, and I just had to plop the characters and plotline into it.

This leads to my next asinine idea: why not do each bit separately, and try them in various combinations until you find something that works? Like, create thirty worlds, thirty plots, and thirty sets of characters, and see if you can't get at least one full-fledged story out of them? And the settings, plots and characters that you don't use now can be picked up and dusted off once you find or make the other elements to fit--writing is patient that way. My Big Future History of Everything has been slowly evolving in my mind for maybe twenty years now, and will wait another twenty for me to use it.

Just me rambling a bit here.

Hmmmmmmmm... that actually is a thought. And I do have characters who've been around in my head since pretty much forever.

Having some music as inspiration also helps. I did find a bit for the empathy apocalypse - not enough for a whole story, but a few scenes at least. That's where a lot of my plots come from - I need music!

[OwlsG0]

Hmmmmmmmm... that actually is a thought. And I do have characters who've been around in my head since pretty much forever.

Having some music as inspiration also helps. I did find a bit for the empathy apocalypse - not enough for a whole story, but a few scenes at least. That's where a lot of my plots come from - I need music!

If you don't listen to the genre already, you might try post-rock. It's all instrumental and devoted to making sound landscapes and all that. Good music to turn off your mind to and let your imagination go where it pleases. A good band to start with is Explosions in the sky