The SSSS Scriptorium

[Fen Shen]

Hehe, a good idea and a funny fanfic, Haiz! I certainly enjoyed reading it.

[Mélusine]

Usually I'm not a fan-fiction girl, but I'm happy I've try with yours, Haiz

[wildfire]

~*OFFICIAL ACTUAL ENGLISH TRANSLATION*~ over here so I don't clutter the thread with two ridiculously long posts

ruth and RandomTexanReader, I'm surprised and delighted you enjoyed it!!! thank youuu

I will regret this tomorrow I feel it in my bones

MEEEEEEP so fun.

Also, quoting a sentence from the actual fanfic:

Everything changed after the Forest Trip.

My first thought:

BUT THEN EVERYTHING CHANGED WHEN THE FIRE NATION ATTACKED!!!


Lol I am so sorry I just had to share it, it would've driven me mad if not. Other than that OH GOSH I love it! : D

[SectoBoss]

~*OFFICIAL ACTUAL ENGLISH TRANSLATION*~ over here so I don't clutter the thread with two ridiculously long posts

That was great! I think you got the teachers just about spot-on. I'm still chuckling at the image of Mikkel bringing a bigger and bigger first aid kit every year.

[Haiz]

jksdfjbsdfbds dfihdfj thank you all
I did not expect this kinda feedback because I know it's pretty flawed, there's no plot, the pacing is flawed, the sentences are incredibly overly..... over-constructed, and what even are dialogues,,, but since you enjoyed it I feel encouraged to write more in the future?? wow what is this fandom doing to me

Mélusine: I'm not a fanfiction kinda kid either, which it's why it's so incredibly strange I wrote one at all

wildfire: CONGRATS U SPOTTED THE REFERENCE
(also did you read the norwegian version too)

[wildfire]

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wildfire: CONGRATS U SPOTTED THE REFERENCE
(also did you read the norwegian version too)

!!

I get golden medal? : D

(no I didn't because I read the english one and then I realized I HAS SCHOOL but I'M BACK NAOW AND NORWEGIAN SHALL HAPPEN!)


Also I realize this has been said before, but PE teacher Sigrun - spot onnn!
And I love that Mikkels first aid kit just grow bigger for each year : 3




Edit:

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(also did you read the norwegian version too)

I have now.


This cracked me up:

Selv Lalli var imponert med hans lynraske fletteskills.

HOORAY FOR "lynraske fletteskills"!!! O, great Reynir, teach me your ways, for I am but a mere short haired girl who never get to braid hair!

[Zithpith]

So I guess I should give an introduction. I was reading through the comic and when I came onto the story about what happened to the Mora trains I got the idea for this one shot. Warning ahead of time this is the writen equivilent of a doodle.

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The Hjorten Rail

   The low rumble of the train’s engine shakes Desi awake. He sits up from his bench, pulling aside the sheet to stretch. He sits up and glances to the machine that had awoken him. The train sits patiently in the station, a small crowd gathering beneath its wide windows. It almost looks like something from a story book, a thing that would have been out of place even before.

   Then again everything seems like it was taken from a storybook like here, he thinks to himself as he sits up.

   “Awake yet?” a warm voice asks behind him.

   Desi turns still sitting to see Ida standing behind him, a cup of water in each hand. He grunts an answer as she hands one of the cups over.

   “Impressive isn’t it? They say you won’t even notice the days pass while you ride,” Ida says  while sitting down and Desi leans against her.

   “Yes you’re proud I get it,”

   “You have to be proud of family once in a while. You feeling better about getting on it now?”

   “Wish it looked more sturdy,” Desi admits in a low voice.

   “You worry too much,” Ida says ruffling Desi’s black hair, a trait that made him stand out or so he was told.

         A hold over from his ancestors who were lucky enough to be on a train northward from some forgotten part of the Silent World when the old world ended.  And the irony of his paranoia didn’t escape him. But when he looks at the train a knot winds itself in his stomach.

        “Desi, you’re getting that look,” Ida says without having to look.

        “I don’t have looks,” Desi says. “Just wish your folk could come here.”

        The two sit quietly for a minute before Desi shifts to look at Ida.

       “Could you make me a promise?”

       “Desi it really is safe,”

       “Just let me finish. If something were to happen, and you have to chose between risking your life for me, you have to help yourself,”

       “Well that’s selfish of you,” Ida says after a moment.

        “Of course, if something happened to you your brother would kill me,” he says with a smile.

       “The thing is I’d rather face a troll than your cousins,” Ida says, playfully elbowing Desi.

        A bell rings across the station and the train doors open.

[SolarPoweredGirl]

*joins the party a year late*
this is my first fan fiction scene. ever.
so uh here goes

LALLI LEARNS MANNERS

(Setting is a fancy restaurant.It's Sigrun's birthday and Tuuri forced everyone to go out somewhere nice.)
[Tuuri is sitting at a table with Lalli, Reynir and Emil. Sigrun and Mikkel are nowhere to be seen.)
Lalli: (sighs) Why do I have to sit next to the messy swede? Again?
[Emil is currently trying to rub sauce off his sleeve]
Emil: (accusingly) What did he say?
Tuuri: Oh, nothing important. (puts on a fake smile.)
Emil: (eyes Lalli suspiciously)
Reynir: (sleepily) Wheereee'sss the fooooddddd.
Tuuri: (scolding) Reynir! You've dipped your hair in our appetizer!
Reynir: Huh? Oh yeah. No worries, I get food in my hair all the time.
Tuuri: (facepalms) It's fine, it's fine. I don't really like, uh, (eyes appetizer, which is of course her favorite food.) whatever that is.
Lalli: Now there's a messy Icelander too?
Tuuri: (whispering) Lalli! Will you start being polite already?
Lalli: Polite? What is that again?
Tuuri: It's when you don't talk about other people behind there backs!
Lalli:...Oh. Okay. Where is the loud one? And the hairy one who smells like onions?
Tuuri: That is the exact opposite of polite! Just watch and learn from the rest of us, okay?
Reynir: (no longer half asleep) Wait, where did Sigrun and Mikkel go?
Tuuri: To see why the food is taking so long. I hope they're being fair. We only got here twenty min-
(Resounding CRASH comes from the kitchen. A food cart rolls out, carrying an angry Sigrun. Whole restaurant turns and looks.)
Sigrun: (stands on top of cart, obviously out of breath and mixed up.) HOW COME I ARE DENIED MY FOOD ON BIRTHDAY? I DEMAND GOOD COOKED FOOD TIME NOW!
(before anyone can do anything, Mikkel rushes out of the kitchen straight into Sigrun's cart as it flies out from beneath her.)
Lalli: (matter of factly) Ah. I know manners know.
Tuuri: (shocked) Huh? No, no, no that is NOT manners! Just, wait here okay?
(Tuuri rushes to help Sigrun and Mikkel.)
Emil: So, uh...maybe we should...
Reynir: Leave? No! We have to help! It's our fault anyway.
Emil: You mean YOUR fault.
Reynir: What!?! We were BOTH complaining about the wait.
Emil: ...well mostly you...
Reynir: WHY YOU LITTLE-
(fight breaks out between Emil and Reynir. The whole restaurant is in chaos except for Lalli, quietly sitting in his chair.)
Lalli: (proud)I watched and I learned from all my friends. Now I know manners. 

[Noodles]

*joins the party a year late*
this is my first fan fiction scene. ever.
so uh here goes
LALLI LEARNS MANNERS

MOST BEST. I love proud Lalli!
Make more of these soon, please. *puppy-dog eyes*

[SolarPoweredGirl]

MOST BEST. I love proud Lalli!
Make more of these soon, please. *puppy-dog eyes*

Thanks!I will do my best to make more 

[AquaAurion]

Hrolfr: I really like what you did with Mikkel's character in this piece! The story feels like it could actually happen and nothing felt out of place =)

Haiz: Such a funny AU =D I felt sorry for poor Reynir, though I can't help but giggle when I try to picturing him covered in snot xD
I read it in both Norwegian and English. I think I prefer the Norwegian version since it sounds a lot funnier

[wildfire]

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Haiz: Such a funny AU =D I felt sorry for poor Reynir, though I can't help but giggle when I try to picturing him covered in snot xD
I read it in both Norwegian and English. I think I prefer the Norwegian version since it sounds a lot funnier

I agree; it was fun reading the English version, but when I read the Norwegian version, so many sentences cracked me up. As I mentioned, "lynraske fletteskills" is one of my favourite things! : 3

[Solovei]

Wow, so much writing, and I've only been gone a short while!

Just a quick post to say that I added the links to the SSSS tag on AO3 and FF.net to the first post; I've mentioned it several times in the disqus comments for people that didn't know we even had fanfic for this fandom, so it seemed like a good idea.

[Daéa Reina]

Haiz: Your fanfic is AWESOME. Normally I dislike AU's, but you made it sound believable, no OOC stuff, and I loved it!!

Lalli: (proud)I watched and I learned from all my friends. Now I know manners. 

This is your first fanfiction ever? Congrats, then! It's really good!
Also, someone should draw this scene.

[SolarPoweredGirl]

This is your first fanfiction ever? Congrats, then! It's really good!
Also, someone should draw this scene.

Thanks! I was thinking of drawing it but I haven't started yet, so yeah there's like a 50/50 chance it'll happen