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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #825 on: May 01, 2017, 12:58:44 AM »
Pg 713

Chance Too Perfect. Better, Except...

Onni can't fathom,
In his tone disapproving.
She couldn't overcome
Her desire to get moving.

All her young days in,
Censure and chastising.
Making her no less brazen,
Aiming for far horizons.

Like it was her destiny,
On their excursion trip.
Instead of life separately,
Experiencing companionship.

It was just too perfect
Of an opportunity.
This treasure hunting trek,
In a strange foreign city.

Perhaps Reynir should also,
Think that way 'bout his lot.
He'll feel better, you know.
Right. He does, except not...


A man left his Icelandic home
Escaped to Denmark to freely roam
With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #826 on: May 01, 2017, 11:27:43 PM »
Pg 714

It Was A Sham, No Danish Palm

Reynir never really
Wanted anywhere dangerous.
It seems that the wally
Was only curious.

He's never leaving again,
If home he returns.
Telling family and friends
Fact from fiction discerned.

Just to Bornholm visit,
Was all that he yearned.
The weather is every bit
As bad as home he just learnt.

In cold contrast stark,
Far from notions preconceived.
It's just as bad in Denmark,
And no palm trees as he believed.
A man left his Icelandic home
Escaped to Denmark to freely roam
With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #827 on: May 04, 2017, 12:48:08 AM »
Pg 715

Voff, Voff, Lick His Face Off

Back in the dream,
The Icelandic stirs.
The consciousness stream,
Where prediction occurs.

Standing in turmoil's throes,
Deep in his thoughts.
In falling fresh snow,
Surrounding that spot.

A companion familiar,
His way happy bounds.
Calling to the figure,
As if in a playground.

Seeing each other, glad,
Well met, dear friends.
Unless there's something bad,
A happy vision god-sent.
A man left his Icelandic home
Escaped to Denmark to freely roam
With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #828 on: May 05, 2017, 12:29:12 AM »
Pg 716

Doggy Footrace, Tracks Misplaced

Pulling on his coat hem,
The puppy-dog says: "Come!"
Let's go! Up and at 'em!
Off your Icelandic bum!

Into the distance chasing,
Puppy dog and his pal.
For what reason they hasten,
Braidy, canine et al.?

As they take off dashing,
Reynir looks at the snow.
Footprints of a fashion,
Like dragging a tail as it goes.

Such a strange depression,
Footsteps with a groove.
A human with extensions?
Confusion in the youth.
A man left his Icelandic home
Escaped to Denmark to freely roam
With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #829 on: May 06, 2017, 08:49:05 PM »
A half-finished poem, in 8-syllable meter (iambic octameter?) organized into 4-line stanzas with AABB rhyme scheme. It's about the confrontation with Sleipnope starting around page 650 or so, and the ensuing battle that resulted in Tuuri's injury (that's gonna be a fun quatrain) Still working, but I like what I have so far, and need to come up with a suitable title (suggestions welcome!)

A blazing flame, a keen-honed blade
there patterns through the darkness made
a team through pain and fire forged
and trolls pursued, on hate engorged.

A plan was formed, a desperate stand
to stay and fight with arms in hand
In fading light of setting sun
they turned and stopped, no more to run.

Runes starkly glittered in the night
to serve as wards against the blight
By new-formed mage, a talent found
and there were laid upon the ground.

Critique welcome - poetry is very much a hobby for me, and a few lines, to my eyes at least, "clunk" quite a bit.
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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #830 on: May 07, 2017, 05:21:10 AM »
Glory, that's a good beginning. Can't as yet come up with a title, but I'm very interested to see where you go with this. That's a fine meter for epic tales!
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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #831 on: May 07, 2017, 10:52:08 PM »
What's The Scoop? Sudden Shwoop

Puppy dog sprints,
With a smile on its muzzle.
Following the footprints,
Reynir stays puzzled.

Pupper stopping, turnest,
"Did I do good?", asks.
Happiness in earnest.
Completing its dream task.

"I did do good!" indeed.
A face full of joy.
After this chase and lead,
What is its next ploy?

"What?" Reynir inquires,
But no answers revealed.
A change then transpires,
The smiling fylgia surreal.
A man left his Icelandic home
Escaped to Denmark to freely roam
With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #832 on: May 08, 2017, 11:50:39 PM »
Pg 718

Mystery Encrypted, Blustery Whipt-ed

Doggy disappears,
Into light spheres.
Bewildered seer,
Questions not cleared...

Tracks, prints, ingrained,
His colour drained,
Knowledge his bane,
Thus queries remain.

Meaningless gaze,
In the dark, always.
Still in a daze,
Up wind speed raised.

Finally, eerily,
Whipped severely,
By high winds bitterly,
Vanish himself, nearly.

---------------------------------

Shepherd Man (based on Rocket Man by Elton John and Bernie Taupin)

A sleepless dream that's right, tonight
Witching hour, he ascends
And not even a bye-bye from my canine friend

I miss my home so much, I miss my life
It's lonely in this place
On such a lifeless trial

And I think it's gonna be a lonely time
'Til gods-hound brings me 'round again to find
I'm not the man I think I am, it shows
Oh, no, no, no
I'm a shepherd man
Shepherd man staring at the clues out here alone

And I think it's gonna be a lonely time
'Til gods-hound brings me 'round again to find
I'm not the man I think I am, it shows
Oh, no, no, no
I'm a stupid man
Stupid man staring at the clues out here alone

This ain't the kind of place to joke and kid
In fact it's cold as hell
And there's no-one there to aid then if you're sick

And all the spirits I don't understand
Pray to the gods and hope they speak
A shepherd man, a shepherd man

And I think it's gonna be a lonely time
'Til gods-hound brings me 'round again to find
I'm not the man I think I am, it shows
Oh, no, no, no
I'm a shepherd man
Shepherd man staring at the clues out here alone

And I think it's gonna be a lonely time
'Til gods-hound brings me 'round again to find
I'm not the man I think I am, it shows
Oh, no, no, no
I'm a stupid man
Stupid man staring at the clues out here alone

And I think it's gonna be a lonely time...
And I think it's gonna be a lonely time...
And I think it's gonna be a lonely time...
And I think it's gonna be a lonely time...
And I think it's gonna be a lonely time...
« Last Edit: May 09, 2017, 11:36:49 AM by corncobman »
A man left his Icelandic home
Escaped to Denmark to freely roam
With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #833 on: May 11, 2017, 01:03:04 AM »
Pg 719

Unstable Cache, Internal Fire Flash

Crossing a bridge vast,
Through the empty lane.
Smoking, struggling past,
'Till can no longer strain.

Vehicle again halts,
Misfires abrupt again.
A mechanical fault,
Their journey constrains.

Again repairs thus,
Precious time consumes.
Yet more disastrous,
Smoke and flame plumes.

Their cargo holds,
The volatile fuel.
Sudden, uncontrolled,
The twist ever cruel.
A man left his Icelandic home
Escaped to Denmark to freely roam
With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #834 on: May 11, 2017, 10:12:36 PM »
Pg 720

Leader Awoke, By Cat and Smoke

Vehicle inferno,
Surprised expressions.
Faces aglow,
Need fire suppression...

Inside sleeping,
Sigrun catching zeds.
No fire alarm beeping,
But kittens panic spreads.

Lalli sitting, the smoke,
Glancing, detects it.
Unchanged, unprovoked,
As if wholly expected.

But instead Sigrun,
The window she opened.
"What's going on, everyone?"
An expression of probing.
A man left his Icelandic home
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With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #835 on: May 15, 2017, 02:02:08 AM »
Pg 721

Grind To A Halt, Not Emil's Fault!

Calmly bucket gripped,
The farmer Danish.
Container tipped,
Fire extinguished.

No more can she maintain,
The damage terminal.
Only trying in vain to
Delay the inevitable.

Is it time to walk now?
Indeed, Mikkel agrees.
Within his plans somehow,
In detailed analyses.

Estimated two days trek for
A light packing person.
But the crew of this wreck
Of the two weeks, need one.

The fire man from Sweden,
Using art of deflection.
It wasn't him, not even
A breath in that direction!
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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #836 on: May 15, 2017, 10:25:55 PM »
Pg 722

Wheelbarrow, Bag of Sleepin', Supermarket Sweepin'

About all the books,
Sigrun asks "What do we do?"
Consideration he took,
They'll take them all too.

Just a requisite,
A small shopping trip.
For this Emil delegate,
With list on paper slip.

Swede with Finnish friend,
And some four items to get.
The pair Mikkel will send
But Lalli doesn't know it yet...

Wheelbarrow, jugs of plastic,
Sleeping bags and a tent.
From commercial patch to nick,
Not a penny will be spent.

Importance least to most,
Back before dark paramount.
To the lost trading post,
With five-fingered discount.
A man left his Icelandic home
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With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #837 on: May 17, 2017, 10:32:33 PM »
Pg 723

Not A Linguist, Don't Get The List

If Tuuri feels well,
She can ready books and meals.
Helping prepare with Mikkel,
She will, great she feels.

He needs Sigrun to guard,
As soon as they embark.
Currently the diehard,
Feels like a dog, she remarks.

With organization proper,
They'll be ready to trek.
But why's the Swedish 'shopper'
Still here, what the heck?

Emil just doesn't get
Meaning of half the list.
Can't procure things just yet,
Before Mikkel gives the gist.

Inside, Sigrun yawns,
Covering mouth with her hand.
Their only radio's gone,
Now no communication band.

---------------------------

Ask the Lalli (based on Ask The Lonely by Journey)

You've been picked and it's over
Got a list, now go soldier
Outside are wheel-ed barrows
Inside is where the doom grows
Picking up the pieces
Something more to believe in

Ere we search the vendors
Can't read the list, remember
Hang on, we can't just go now
You know, with every dark street
The stuff, nothing comes easy
Hang on, ask the Lalli

We've got some agitation
With your written translations
This list in our possession
My part, my many questions
Don't get your weird tenses
Won't be up to the Finn who stares

Ere we search the vendors
Can't read the list, remember
Hang on, we can't just go now
You know, with every dark street
The stuff, nothing comes easy
Hang on, ask the Lalli

When you need to search out there
You just ask the Lalli
When you're lost and need a prayer
You just ask the Lalli

When you need a scout somewhere
You just ask the Lalli
When you're out to make a pair
You just ask the Lalli

When you need to search out there
You just ask the Lalli
When you're lost and need a prayer
You just ask the Lalli

Ask the Lalli
When you need to search out there
When you're lost and need a prayer
Ask the La-La-La-La-La-Lalli
La-La-La-La-La-Lalli
« Last Edit: May 17, 2017, 11:07:09 PM by corncobman »
A man left his Icelandic home
Escaped to Denmark to freely roam
With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #838 on: May 18, 2017, 08:44:30 PM »
Another couple stanzas done. About half to 2/3 of the way done now, I think. Now with title!

The Battle of the Clearing

A blazing flame, a keen-honed blade
there patterns through the darkness made
a team through pain and fire forged
and trolls pursued, on blood engorged.

A plan was formed, a desperate stand
to stay and fight with arms in hand
In fadling light of setting sun
they turned and stopped, no more to run.

Runes starkly glittered in the night
to serve as wards against the blight
By new-formed mage, a talent found
and there were laid upon the ground.

Explosives too, gingerly placed
with utmost care, and wire spaced
to trip the traps now placed in lines
and detonate the deadly mines.

As sun sunk low, the horde drew near
to feast on those their hearts held dear
the team fell back, the tank a wall
and there they stood, to fight or fall. 

An orange spark upon the field
as the first ghost burned on their shield
and then a blast that split the dark
as planted bombs ripped beasts apart.

Two rifles sang their warlike song
in hands of soldiers holding strong
The tune of rage and desperate need
of the Norwegian and the Swede.

But then upon the field did walk
a phantom steed, which did not balk
to mines or runes, and then snuffed out
the magic lines, clearing a route.

A burning hand, knife clenched in fist
flashed through the air, and did not miss
the strike well-aimed, but far too weak
to end the omnicidal freak.

-Glory

I'm still not happy with the first stanza, but I really like "A team in pain and fire forged" and its really, really hard to find a perfect rhyme for "forged" that doesn't sound incredibly clunky. Still a WIP, but coming along nicely  :D
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Re: Poetry collection
« Reply #839 on: May 19, 2017, 12:45:14 AM »
Pg 724

Transport Will Provide, Even If They Have Died

With the radio silent,
Call to Sigrun, lying prone.
In the engine fire violent,
Their communication's blown.

They can't tell home base,
That they're on their way.
But even with no trace,
They'll be there, Sigrun says.

Happens all the time it seems,
Losing contact with crew,
They still send out the teams,
It's always what they do.

Even with lack of contact,
As promised and aforesaid,
They'll come, matter of fact,
Even knowing that they're dead...
A man left his Icelandic home
Escaped to Denmark to freely roam
With hair braided red
He got hit on the head
With a crate lid slammed onto his dome

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