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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1005 on: September 29, 2022, 05:46:33 PM »
So considering Sigrun's birthday is Oct 5.  We should have that as the prompt of the week?

Then onto Tarot-tober?
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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1006 on: September 30, 2022, 01:19:00 PM »
Agreed, prompt for the upcoming week is Sigrun and then the week prompt goes on a break for the rest of October.

Should we set the prompt for beginning of November already, to minimize risk of an overlong break?
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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1007 on: September 30, 2022, 03:23:51 PM »
Agreed, prompt for the upcoming week is Sigrun and then the week prompt goes on a break for the rest of October.

Should we set the prompt for beginning of November already, to minimize risk of an overlong break?

how about winter?  it will definitely be cold and snowy
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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1008 on: September 30, 2022, 05:41:44 PM »
Good idea! So, prompts are:
1st week of October - Sigrun
*break for YoinkTober*
1st week of November - Winter

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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1009 on: October 04, 2022, 12:01:05 PM »
Fate gives all of us three teachers, three friends, three enemies, and three great loves in our lives. But these twelve are always disguised, and we never know which one is which until we've loved them, left them, or fought them.

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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1010 on: November 04, 2022, 03:35:45 PM »
This week I think is supposed to be winter now that Tarotober is over.

If not, well I am early...
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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1011 on: November 04, 2022, 05:58:07 PM »
You are right, ti is for this week. A great re-start!
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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1012 on: November 08, 2022, 09:44:36 AM »
This week I think is supposed to be winter now that Tarotober is over.

If not, well I am early...
https://archiveofourown.org/works/36794107/chapters/107665152
Nice story, dmeck! Quite enjoyable! We need more stories from Sigrun's pre-SSSS times!  :sigrun:
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And yey, I'm back at writing! Working on a Winter story! :) I hope to have it ready until the end of the week... let's see if I manage.
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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1013 on: November 08, 2022, 09:53:30 AM »
Nice story, dmeck! Quite enjoyable! We need more stories from Sigrun's pre-SSSS times!  :sigrun:
(I already left more comments on AO3)

And yey, I'm back at writing! Working on a Winter story! :) I hope to have it ready until the end of the week... let's see if I manage.

Thank you.  It is good to see you back.  I was feeling alone.  RL can really kick butt.
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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1014 on: November 08, 2022, 10:35:57 AM »
Thank you.  It is good to see you back.  I was feeling alone.  RL can really kick butt.
Thanks!
And yes, it can. But just like Sigrun in your tale we have to move on! :)

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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1015 on: November 09, 2022, 06:26:57 AM »
Hi! I'm working on my "Winter" story, and I'm very happy to be back at writing!
Now I'm feeling like doing things different this time. Instead of a third or first person outside narrator I was thinking on having the storyteller, Ensi, speaking to her grandchildren.
But I can see two options, and would ask you, my friends, to help me decide.

So I'm going to post here the first section (actually the only one that's ready) here in two formats:

1 - It's all dialogues, leaving things implicit

Spoiler: show
A Winter's Tale

"So much snow!"
"Hum... Lots of snow."
"Can we stay with you tonight, grandma?"
"My dear children, if you were listening - as you should - to your parents, you would already know that tonight they are meeting some friends and asked me to take care of you."
"See Onni? I told you!"
"No, you didn't!"
"I did! Back at the trail, before arriving here, near the last bridge!"
"I don't recall anything like that."
"Lalli, didn't I told Onni?"
"Hummm..."
"Lalli! Com'on!"
"Yes."
"See! I told you!"
"Annoying sis!"
"You are annoying! And deaf!"
"I'm not..."
"Onni, Tuuri, enough! You three come sit with me by the fire, and I may tell a story before it's time to go to bed."
"As long as Tuuri stops."
"Oh, yes, a story! Please! One from the floating town?"
"Stories are good."
"A story from the floating town... Yes, sure. Let me think... Ah! I remember one! You're going to like it! The right story for a dark winter night! But it may be a bit scary..."
"I don't care! It's all safe and cozy here, and I'm already a big girl!"
"I don't know... I'm not afraid, but Tuuri will keep asking to sleep in my bed for days if she gets scared."
"No I won't!"
"I think she's old enough for that, Onni. And you, Lalli?"
"Okay."
"Fine! So come closer and let me begin..."


2 - A theatrical format, where scenaries and players are clearly and explicitly marked.

Spoiler: show
A Winter's Tale

[A classic Finnish wooden cabin with a window and a lit fireplace. There's a thick carpet over the floor, and a rocking chair. Through the window one can see that's dark outside, and it's snowing. Tuuri, Onni and Lalli gather close to the window, while Ensi sits at the chair next to the fireplace]
[Tuuri, excited] "So much snow!"
[Lalli] "Hum... Lots of snow."
[Onni] "Can we stay with you tonight, grandma?"
[Ensi] "My dear children, if you were listening - as you should - to your parents, you would already know that tonight they are meeting some friends and asked me to take care of you."
[Tuuri] "See Onni? I told you!"
[Onni] "No, you didn't!"
[Tuuri] "I did! Back at the trail, before arriving here, near the last bridge!"
[Onni] "I don't recall anything like that."
[Tuuri] "Lalli, didn't I told Onni?"
[Lalli] "Hummm..."
[Tuuri] "Lalli! Com'on!"
[Lalli] "Yes."
[Tuuri] "See! I told you!"
[Onni] "Annoying sis!"
[Tuuri] "You are annoying! And deaf!"
[Onni] "I'm not..."
[Ensi, raising her voice] "Onni, Tuuri, enough! You three come sit with me by the fire, and I may tell a story before it's time to go to bed."
[Onni] "As long as Tuuri stops."
[Tuuri] "Oh, yes, a story! Please! One from the floating town?"
[Lalli] "Stories are good."
[Ensi] "A story from the floating town... Yes, sure. Let me think... Ah! I remember one! You're going to like it! The right story for a dark winter night! But it may be a bit scary..."
[Tuuri] "I don't care! It's all safe and cozy here, and I'm already a big girl!"
[Onni] "I don't know... I'm not afraid, but Tuuri will keep asking to sleep in my bed for days if she gets scared."
[Tuuri] "No I won't!"
[Ensi] "I think she's old enough for that, Onni. And you, Lalli?"
[Lalli] "Okay."
[Ensi] "Fine! So come closer and let me begin..."
[The children sit on the carpet, looking at Ensi as she watches the fire]


Both are challenging, yet I love a nice challenge! So, which do you prefer? :)
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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1016 on: November 09, 2022, 08:36:11 AM »
I think I like the second better, as otherwise I tend to lose track of who's saying what. Maybe I'm just not as good at that as some people? I didn't catch on, reading the first one, to its being Lalli who was 'humm'ing, and thought it was Ensi; but also, when I read things (in general, not just specifically this) with long stretches of dialogue that don't identify who's speaking very often, I often get confused about who's said what.

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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1017 on: November 09, 2022, 09:12:34 AM »
I actually do not have an opinion of either.  I like it though :)
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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1018 on: November 09, 2022, 10:29:47 AM »
I like both, but I think I prefer the feel of the first one.

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Re: Prompt of the week!
« Reply #1019 on: November 10, 2022, 05:36:25 AM »
As someone for whom dialogue-based stories come the most naturally, I spend a lot of time thinking about this issue.
I know you're being experimental, dmeck, but I want to rant about the problem and the usual solution.  That is, speech tags, which describe either the act of speaking, something else the character is doing, or something the POV character is thinking. You know:

"Good morning!" said Emil.

Lalli did not meet his eye. "Mmm."

Oh no! Was he upset again? "Sorry! I will go away!"

I think most people would agree that the best thing is to have as few tags as are needed to keep the reader from getting confused. I spend a lot of time (A LOT, like, definitely more than I spend on the dialogue itself) fiddling with my dialogue tags. I know I end up using a lot of cliche ones to indicate emotion (people staring, playing with their hair, whatever).

Anyway, here, I like the first version better. It feels more immediate, while the second version deliberately puts the reader outside of the story, and creates distance. (I see it mostly as a cheatsheet for the first version, lol.) And I think you did a great job keeping things clear for the reader. The only part that confused me is "Stories are good." Lalli had seemed so uninterested until then that I was surprised to see him jumping into the conversation.
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