Thanks DarkRawen. I should have edited that more but I was kind of pulling something short from my archives, trying to find a test case story I could throw out.
In general, I also like feedback on the worldbuilding and characters, but this was too short a segment for that.
I am going to finish up my present thing and post it next.
(Dark dystopia/post apocalpytic sci-fi, called Harvestman.)
Everett, I got Solovei's approval and have created a folder for you, and synced my device with yours.
Everyone else, go add his device ID so he syncs reliably.