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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #30 on: June 08, 2021, 01:20:29 PM »
Well, that was unexpected.  ;D Such delightful works.
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #31 on: June 08, 2021, 01:29:34 PM »
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #32 on: June 08, 2021, 07:30:16 PM »
OK, let's try this, approaching the nick of time ...

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Vacations Up North

Sigrun

How long had they been sitting there? Five hours, seven? Nobody dared to move from his place or say a word, not with Surma hunched right around the corner. The sun had set, shining across their knees as it lowered, and the darkness that followed had imprisoned each of them with nothing but his own mental horrors for company. Mikkel on her left, close enough to the monster to see it if he turned his head and bowed a bit to the left and around the corner. On her other side ... well, she had called Emil her "right-hand warrior" on more than one occasion. But fighting was not an option right now. Nothing was ... no, wait. She wasn't allowed to think that. Finding an option, any viable course of action, was her job. A shitty job, but someone's gotta do it ... Light? Was it dusk already? At least it would crack open their prisons ...

Anderl

Light. A bit of light, getting slowly stronger, intruding into the haze he was caught in. Revealing ... a cellar, water dripping from the ceiling. He never knew why he would always come to here, how he even got there. He did not belong here, though. He belonged ... elsewhere ... up? Better get going, then.

Sigrun

Yup, it's the morning. We can see again, give each other a quick nod, but when Mikkel took a quick peek around the corner, he turned back slowly and slowly shook his head. It seems that Surma is still with us, the guardian of our prison, keeping us locked in place while everyone outside happily continued their normal lives. Like the birds I can hear singing as if there's nothing wrong in the world, much less just a couple meters away ...

... wait. Singing birds? And Surma doesn't even twitch? Apparently it's not triggered as easily as we feared ...

"Mikkel," she whispered. Emil narrowly avoided jumping to his feet, but luckily he was seated away from Surma. Mikkel was too phlegmatic to jerk, but as he turned towards her, his eyes showed that he believed his last moment had come. "Singing birds," she added with a nod towards the empty window frames, still limiting her words, listening whether they would nonetheless cause Surma to stir.

Her two companions did not need any words at all to tell her that they understood her idea. With beaming faces, they leaned closer.

Anderl

Up. More light. More thoughts. Where was he going? A room. What room?

MY roOm. I hAve a Room heRe. I nEeD tO gEt theRe.

... wHy DO i nEed To?

Sigrun

"So we can talk about plans. Ideas?"
"I don't think that we can afford Surma seeing us move. Ever."
"It's just around that corner, though ..."
"Yes. So we're still stuck until it gets out of here."
"It doesn't want to, apparently."
"Can we make it go?"
"Shouting 'shoo' is right out."
"It needs to be lured out of here."
"How?"
"Väinö said it's attracted to sharp noises."
"... Emil, you didn't set up a remote controlled charge outside, by chance?"
"I don't have an RC. Nobody ever gave me one. And no, no charge without one, either."

Anderl

LEfT. mY roOM Is to ... nO. TO tHe rIGht.

He could now clearly remember the cellar. The place he woke up in. Every morning, for ... gods, how long? But he could not remember what his room looked like. His room. How could it be "his room" when he could not remember it? How can you forget your home?

my hOme ... iS a hoUse. "mY RoOm" Is noT My hoMe. hoW ... ?

i'm In a hOteL. yOu haVE "A rOOm" aT a hoTEl. yoU gO to A HOteL ... oN A vaCatIon.

The answer suddenly popped up in his mind. He was far away from his home. For the first time in an eternity, he had taken a vacation ... to go skiing. Skiing is done in winter. He had to work in winter. He had booked two weeks at a ski resort way up North, so that he could be back for his job before winter truly started back at home. His job. He must be way overdue to get back to it, and he needed his equipment for that. Which was in his room. He had brought it on his vacation, masses of red tape be damned, so that he would be able to pop out of the plane home and get to work instantly.

I haVe tO go To my roOm tO gEt my eQUipmEnt anD stARt wOrkInG. I am nEedeD.

... but if he was needed so urgently, why has he been away from his room for so long that he could barely remember what it looked like?

Sigrun

"So ... no way to have a diversion?"
"None that I can think of."
"The others could maybe create one?"
"They cannot know of Surma being here, and would have come to look for us by now if they could."
"... at which point Surma would have killed us all, I suppose."
"Not. Interested. Right. Now."
"When will it move on its own?"
"No idea. Maybe never, unless prompted."
"It does get prompted by other grosslings as well, though ..."
"When they get stirred by whoever ... and definitely not while it's still light out ..."

Anderl

Empty. The corridors he walked were empty.

He now had an idea why it had been so long since he had been to his room. Every morning he came to in in a wet cellar. Every morning he started to ... walk ... towards his room. Every morning, he would run into ... other guests ... on the corridors, and get distracted in one way or another, never actually getting to his room.

Today, the corridors were empty. Something must have caused all the other guests to be ... elsewhere.

There. His room. His equipment. He would be back on the job today. He was needed.

Sigrun

"So ... ?"
"Nope. Still no idea."
"Maybe there's a bit of ancient ammo that'll just happen ..."
"No. Quit dreaming."
"Damn."

Anderl

He was not at home. He did not have transport, a helicopter, like he usually would. It did not matter, he was at a mountain ridge, and knew ski slopes to be downhill from him. He had his equipment. He was back on the job.

The light was so bright now that he had trouble seeing, though. He couldn't see the snow around - matter of fact, the landscape looked outright green. But it was winter, wasn't it? And in winter, there was snow. Always. And he was always needed to be on the job then. Skiing regions need proper avalanche control.
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #33 on: June 08, 2021, 09:58:59 PM »
We don't sweat the rules.
Taking Haiku 101.
Here at Haiku U.
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JoB, your story is excellent.  Poor Anderl has no clue that it's summer, which I guess is good news for our crew.

grey, a 'most best' plan indeed, at least from Sigrun's & Emil's POV.  (I could quibble with the spelling of 'Pipsqueak'? Nah, funnier this way)

And Jitter, that actually happened to me!  A coworker once screwed up his courage to tell me that he was going to ...a Pride Parade.  I responded with something like, 'oh, cool, that'll be fun' but he was so clearly relieved that his face broke into a wide grin and he blurted out, "I'm going to be a dad!"
Cue a very puzzled ww sputtering & doing mental gymnastics to figure out how those two sentences fit together.
In my defense, it was the 80s and adoptions by gay couples were a very new concept, even in California.
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #34 on: June 09, 2021, 01:29:36 AM »
Very neat chapter break content for an unexpected and sudden chapter break!

I've never seen a haiku chain before :) It's fun to imagine what you're all describing!

Grey, I love your use of the font! Amazing how much it contributes to the feeling of this being a conversation they would actually have. And with a plan and diagram Sigrun would create!

Jitter, this story is so cute... yay, I hope Emil and Lalli figure out parenting soon! I love the mental image of a sauna being the location for such important conversations like this.

JoB, interesting take on the idea of a vacation up north. I'm sure Sigrun, Emil, and Mikkel are enjoying their stay in the hotel room with the extra guest. Can't help but feel bad for Anderl, though! He's all confused :(

And Jitter, that actually happened to me!  A coworker once screwed up his courage to tell me that he was going to ...a Pride Parade.  I responded with something like, 'oh, cool, that'll be fun' but he was so clearly relieved that his face broke into a wide grin and he blurted out, "I'm going to be a dad!"
Cue a very puzzled ww sputtering & doing mental gymnastics to figure out how those two sentences fit together.
In my defense, it was the 80s and adoptions by gay couples were a very new concept, even in California.

I know very few adults IRL, and fewer yet who acknowledge the existence of gay people. It's always nice to hear of happy interactions like this, especially from so many years ago :)

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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #35 on: June 09, 2021, 03:41:27 AM »
Catbirds, it would definitely take place in the sauna! Or possibly while cooling down in the porch between rounds of löyly. Perhaps the latter would be even more natural, but Uncle Onni needed the heat :)

There is a snippet of the baby being born already, but nothing on their family life since. And she’s mentioned in a snip decades later. What lies in between hasn’t come ro me yet. I’m sure there is something unexpected along the ride!
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #36 on: June 09, 2021, 05:30:11 AM »
Wave, that was an interesting conversation, no doubt! Did him adopt the child indeed? And sorry for the mistake. I knew that I should check, but was in a hurry to finish it...

catbirds, yes, the font looks really fine. Almost as if it was part of the story. Almost because I'm not even close to Minna's talent... but we do what we can. :)

JoB, another fine story! I hope it becomes a habit! :) Now I would love to know what happens next!

(BTW couldn't Emil just throw one of his charges through the very large window Surma broke to enter? It wouldn't make much noise as it flew across the room.)

Jitter, I think I already said that: You will end having a full story of Emil and Lalli's family. :) At some point it will be a matter of putting all parts together.

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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #37 on: June 09, 2021, 06:36:13 AM »
Grey, yeah, maybe it will :) The distant future snip where she's mentioned is actually part of the Spirit House, so clearly the Spirit House and Toivosaari timelines are interconnected.

The story I started to write when All This happened, and part of which became the Woodland Sounds bit for the break before this one, seems to be related to both timelines. Hopefully I manage to get back to it at some point.
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #38 on: June 09, 2021, 08:47:35 AM »
Now I would love to know what happens next!
Well, Anderls job is to set off explosive charges to trigger avalanches, so ...

(BTW couldn't Emil just throw one of his charges through the very large window Surma broke to enter? It wouldn't make much noise as it flew across the room.)
Certainly, but it would be very much visible to Surma and the songbirds have not yet graciously provided a mating dance on the windowsill to demonstrate that that's a safe thing to do, too. (Also, I guess it wouldn't lure Surma far enough away from Sigruns group to be completely out of sight, even if Surma does not return to the same corner to get out of the sunlight.)

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In all seriousness, if there's something making it unmistakably clear that we're fully in the Fictional Realm of Fiction™ here, it's the premise that pre-Rash Anderl could cut through enough red tape in a lifetime to carry his "equipment" along on a "vacation" in Finland. And I'm pretty sure that the Alps aren't the Lair of Snowmocles where avalanche controllsonnel can never take a single day off to do some skiing themselves, either. ;)
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #39 on: June 09, 2021, 04:00:45 PM »
(BTW couldn't Emil just throw one of his charges through the very large window Surma broke to enter? It wouldn't make much noise as it flew across the room.)

Oh come now... this is Emil we're talking about here!  ;D  You know he'd fluff it somehow, and the charge would go off too soon.  :))
(Which would be expected/unexpected itself, and could be funny to boot.)
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #40 on: June 09, 2021, 04:12:10 PM »
A little break cannot break such creative spirits. Eh!

Hey, remember when the crew got supplies dropped in, but along with the carrots and stuff they got an unexpected and generally unwelcome extra in the shipment?  Good times, good times...
One big rabbit who's going to eat all this wast--carrots, and then it'll get FAT and we'll EAT IT.
That, or the shorter one.

here's my contribution, this was quite fun to draw :)
Kitty proving far too smart and valuable a member, by now that'd be Emil alright?

Men in red jump in through the doors and broken windows. “Nobody expects the Spanish Inquisition! Apprehend them!”
Never going heretic-hunting without my red shirt. Matter of dignity. Even monsters seem keen on that color

And here's my (un?)expected contribution! :)
and with such big mouths monsters ought to have good taste.

Expecting
OK, let's try this, approaching the nick of time ...
How cute. Babies and lulling monsters and focus on NO POTTY BREAK ALLOWED need tiiiiime.

Me also very impressed by poetry and versed jokes. Counting my own two feet already feel like a challenge.


Marker my two four cents anyway.
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #41 on: June 09, 2021, 04:37:21 PM »
Not sure if it fits with the theme but here anyway.



Just some silly nonsense I thought up.

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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #42 on: June 09, 2021, 05:17:01 PM »
I love both of these!  Prime Emil content on them both.   :emil: :emil: :emil: Heeee

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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #43 on: June 10, 2021, 10:39:50 AM »

12.11.
The patients remain unconscious. The rash is spreading rapidly, now covering most of the upper torso as well as shoulders and face on all of the patients. No organ failure is discernible and brain activity appears normal, yet they all completely remain unresponsive.

Dr. Santos wanted to try music. Sometimes patients with degenerative conditions respond to music long after speech is gone. Varying degrees of change were visible in the brain waves, indicating the patients' hearing remains. Perhaps this is a step forward?

13.11.
The music appears to be useless. We still register them hearing, but no response. Patients D and H have stopped coughing and are breathing normally, with no fever. We hope they are improving.

14.11.
Patient D suffered massive multiple organ failure and perished at 04:53 this morning. None of the readings hints to any reason for this. Patients A and B appear to be improving. The cough and vomiting have stopped as well as the spread of the rash. We keep playing the music for them.

16.11.
The rash is still intensifying on patient G. It now covers all of her skin from the waist upwards, and is starting to spread onto the legs. It must be painful for her to breathe now. For the remaining patients, the spread is stopped. A, B and E appear to be on the mend, having been cough-free for a couple of days now. A seems to react specifically to certain songs! Hopefully we well soon see some functionality returning.

17.11.
A, B and K died of multiple organ failure. We still have no idea what this is. Patient G is clearly responding to the music.

19.11.
We have administered the anti-retroviral for a full week now. Patients E and F remain cough-free and appear to be improving. G has brain waves resembling a sleeping person, but we cannot wake her up.

20.11.
Patient H died. That makes seven. We still can't tell what causes the devastating multi-organ failure. Not knowing the cause means we cannot help.

21.11.
G is definitely mending. She is trying to open her mouth, although the rash makes it difficult. Her entire face is badly swollen. Dammit this coat is itchy today!

22.11.
Patient G is struggling in her bed and trying to open her mouth. I'm not sure anymore that she's improving. I wonder if they have changed the detergent to something I'm allergic to.

23.11.
Patient G is the only remaining patient. Her vitals are getting stronger and brainwaves more active. She is clearly trying to move her mouth. I intend to check her face to see if I could alleviate any discomfort. Although with that swelling I doubt it.

Nurse, please hold her forehead while I try to pry open OH MY GOD What is that! Arghrrlssssssslllssssssdsd
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Re: Emergency Chapter Break Challenge - Expected / Unexpected
« Reply #44 on: June 10, 2021, 11:23:32 AM »
I wonder if they have changed the detergent to something I'm allergic to.
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