So, here's a question: can a character exist independent of the setting?
My personal take on it is: decidedly not. Every character must be shaped by their setting to a greater or lesser degree, which is why I don't tend to put stuff in the aforementioned OC thread, and why, for example, "Jazz Age"!Onni is crippled by stage fright, while Western!Onni is afraid of the racism of the outside world, instead of being deathly afraid of Beasts, Trolls, Giants, and the Rash.
On the other hand, some things can remain consistent in a character regardless of setting. Any version of Emil, for example, will always be a mass of insecurity poorly cloaked by pomposity, and also Lalli's friend, assuming Lalli is present. On balance, though, more is changed by setting than is constant. The Western AU has allowed Emil to gain more confidence than the "Jazz Age" AU, for example, so the former will have fewer outbursts of insecurity than the latter.
So, now you can all tell me every way in which I am mistaken.
No, I think you're right, LooNEY. The character and the environment shape and are shaped by one another. In a different world, the same person will react to different things, but will react to things of similar ........nature? Value? Meaning?......in the same way.
Something I worked out is that a character is well created (or, for a fanfic writer, well understood), if you, the writer, can drop the character into a situation, watch what they do, and think, 'yes well of course, being X, what else could he do?' If doing that leads to a character reacting in a totally unexpected way, either your understanding of your character deepens, or shows an unexpected facet; otherwise, you know you have it wrong, and will have to take that character back to basics, and build or discover them again.
Something I worked out is that a character is well created (or, for a fanfic writer, well understood), if you, the writer, can drop the character into a situation, watch what they do, and think, 'yes well of course, being X, what else could he do?' If doing that leads to a character reacting in a totally unexpected way, either your understanding of your character deepens, or shows an unexpected facet; otherwise, you know you have it wrong, and will have to take that character back to basics, and build or discover them again.
So my question would be: Do you think a setting can exist independently from a character? Would you be able to use the same setting for two stories or as habitat for completely unrelated sets of characters?
So my question would be: Do you think a setting can exist independently from a character? Would you be able to use the same setting for two stories or as habitat for completely unrelated sets of characters?
I think it's called "expanded universe"... ;) But to answer the question, this depends on how much you've created of your world. I've recently became quite a fan of worldbuilding - I have an entire world map, with all countries and their capital cities marked, for a story which never moves out of a hundred kilometres' radius from the start point! By now, if you pointed at any random point on the map, I could give you a story set in it. It helps if you approach it sorta like building an RPG campaign (which is how the abovementioned story started). You set up a coherent setting, give it rules it abides by, figure out more important parts of its backstory and present-day events, and voila! It can accomodate pretty much every character.So, for purposes of discussion, what is a setting, then?
So, for purposes of discussion, what is a setting, then?
Ah, ye olde Nature vs. Nurture debate.
I think that, while characters certainly wouldn't be the same characters if they were placed in a completely different environment, you also can't discount the various innate ways in which they respond to environments. Someone used the example of Emil and Lalli being switched at birth, so I'll expand on that one; if the switch had somehow happened, they certainly would no longer be the same Emil and Lalli that we know and love. However, Lalli-in-Emil's-position would hardly be a carbon copy of the vain pretty boy, insecurity-masquerading-as-arrogance either, nor would Emil display Lalli's particular brand of taciturn introversion. Environment does play a huge role in shaping the characters, but there are also a lot of things innate to the characters themselves - intelligence, introversion/extroversion, natural talent, mental dis/ability, even physical appearance - that can't be discounted either. And if you decide to arbitrarily change these factors, then you don't have the same character anymore anyway, rendering the whole point moot.
Nah, Lalli wouldn't change into Emil clone, and Emil wouldn't change into a copy of Lalli. I think I didn't put it very well in my post, but I agree with you in that there is some part of the character that won't change regardless of setting the author would put it in. If Emil and Lalli were to be switched at birth, they wouldn't become a grey-haired Emil and blonde Lalli, of course. But I don't believe they'd become people we could recognize as Emil and Lalli if we didn't know the switch had taken place.
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In either case, I think many stories, whether successive or simultaneous, can be told.
This is an interesting discussion for me because I just drastically changed the setting of one of my stories. It started out as a modern-day small town setting, but I decided I could get more of a story if the characters were in a more medieval/fantasy village. And some of their traits are still there; Diana is still curious, Lucy still cares greatly about her friends, Rebecca is still the responsible older sister for Ethan. But some new traits popped up with the new setting- I figured out that Diana likes to sew, and Matthew likes to bake, and Lucy is average at both of those things. If I put them in the sci-fi setting of my other story, I would probably learn how resourceful and brave each character is, and what advantages they have that they would use in a more tense situation.Thats great! *pretends to understand how you did it and is not secretly weirded out at all*
What's interesting is that I really changed the social setting than the place. It's still a small town with an old mansion on a hill, but now it's in some medieval-age world/time/society.
The setting will only be as interesting as the writer's description of it. As will the characters. So it's important to be able to visualise or remember a setting well enough to describe it clearly to the reader, and to be able to imagine a character well enough to do the same.And to remember that the setting is real to the character and likely the only reality they know.
I can't just go and put a character that 'feels' lime-green and silver in a world that is mostly black, red and dark grey, with hints of saturated dark blue and green! It's impossible!
But once characters of 'the first generation' die, the colour/energy/feel of a world changes for me, because their weight is missing from weave and matter, my sensibilities start revolting once more.
The only thing I can do with my characters and worlds is to try to slowly morph them by adding or subtracting strands of colour, a smell, a distinct sound or, well, "energies" :(
Thats great! *pretends to understand how you did it and is not secretly weirded out at all*
Well, at least the characters changed with their surroundings. I get that part.
What do you think you will be able to get out of the medieval setting opposed to the modern one?
Lazy8: noticed that you were asking Asterales about synaesthesia? I don't know whether that is what is happening with her, but there are other reasons as well for using other senses as descriptors. I have a poet friend who is blind, and years ago knew another poet and musician who started to go deaf as a child due to a disease which affected the bones of his inner ears and who became totally deaf by his early twenties. Their work is good verging on brilliant in both cases, but has a slight but disturbing element of alienage when it comes to descriptions.
If you want to see that progression of writing from the perspective of a wonderful poet whose sensorium gradually changed, look for the work of Judith Wright. The descriptors changed over time, especially in her landscape poetry, as she gradually became profoundly deaf. And of course it can be the mental balance that changes, and with it the landscape depicted. You don't have to go past the work of Vincent van Gogh to see that.
If you read my stuff, for that matter, you'll note that the balance of descriptors is a little strange. In my case, I've a very good proprioceptive sense- I can, if you like, always 'feel' myself very accurately in the landscape, and it reflects in my writing. My sense of touch is very good, and I have a 'perfumers' nose' which again is reflected in descriptions of landscape, food, people and the like. On the other hand, because my hearing is no longer brilliant, and my eyesight is fading, being far better at night than in glaring bright light, the things I notice, and therefore describe, are different.
But I completely get Asterale's descriptions, and find them interesting.
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[...] I want it to be more humans vs. fate/nature which works better with a more nature-heavy setting. And I read a lot of fantasy books, so a medieval setting is one I feel like I actually understand better, plus I have a bit more flexibility.That is probably true. I hope the setting works out for you the way you imagine!
Flavor is a very good word, too. I think words kind of have a "flavor" and a texture according to tongue movement and sound.Spoiler: Sorta long, sorta rambly show
I understand the kind of difference the medium could make. I would find it hard to write the exact same story in German and in English.Spoiler: show
Slightly off-topic, but... do you have synesthesia, Asterales? Never seen anyone describe a character or world in terms of color or smell before.
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Question : am I the only one always wondering if I write properly the characters who are the opposite gender ? (*Fears not to be clear enough* Mens, for me, because I'm a girl ?)
Question : am I the only one always wondering if I write properly the characters who are the opposite gender ? (*Fears not to be clear enough* Mens, for me, because I'm a girl ?)
Also, the problem raises its ugly head when I have to write romantic scenes.*Shivers* My nightmare... okay, less than battles/confrontations, but I always feel so clumsy !
I'd say if you worry about this, just give it to some guy to read and ask him if it feels right.Of course :) But I haven't a lot of guys in my potential beta-readers... Until now the only one hadn't saw too much problems... I hope...
But with modern/fantasy/non-historical settings, I haven't found it a problem. I take the same approach to writing women as I do to writing men, and it all comes out fine. Since people are individuals, it isn't really like there is a "proper" way to write anybody, really.Maybe I'm thinking too much :) I tend to write better, or to have the impression to be able to write better when I have an experience to relate with what I'm writing, because I can use memories, sensations... to describe something more "real".
For example, a friend I was beta-reading had a male character, a big brother, strong, worrying for brother and sister, and putting his hands on his hips while asking them where they were. Which is an attitude I never saw on any men. I'm not saying men aren't allowed to do it, but with the character's temperament, it sounds wrong, folding his arms was a more coherent attitude.I'm still not sure I'm clear.
Okay. First conclusion : I'm worrying too much ^^
One tends to be one's own harshest critic.*Conscientiously looks in an other direction as if she wasn't concerned*
And I totally agree with Yuuago that it is the individual characteristics that are ultimately pivotal, not the gender or sex.Haaaaaaa ! It wasn't what I... *Blames her English*
Haaaaaaa ! It wasn't what I... *Blames her English**Pat, pat*Shades ! Why have I so much shades in my language and not in English T_T
So I'd like to hear people's thoughts on worldbuilding when writing original fiction.
It's been a very long time since I've written anything completely original, so much so that most of the settings I came up with were pretty generic. Character building comes a lot more easily than it used to--I've gotten to the point where more often than not OCs will simply tell me things about themselves that I never thought out or planned--but I've gotten so used to playing in other writers' sandboxes that constructing my own sandbox is a skill that's kind of fallen out of use. And it sort of got me thinking about what goes into putting together a really unique setting like A:tLA, Ursula K. Le Guin's Hainish universe, or of course SSSS, where people look at it and remember it for being new and refreshing rather than just thinking "Oh yeah, there's another Tolkien ripoff."
Thoughts?
From the writing board that I've been on for several years, it seems that people either worry they are writing the opposite sex wrong OR that men are easier to write than women (coming from women). The latter seems to be because men are presented as the default a lot of the time. But in the case of the having issues with the opposite sex, it seems to me that the problem is not seeing them as people first and guys or girls second.
There are going to be certain things expected of men or women in any culture, and some cultures will be stricter about enforcing those expectations. But no one perfectly fits what is expected of their sex or gender.
But definitely, if you give a guy character a trait that isn't seen as masculine and it fits him, there is no reason to change it. If it doesn't fit, it's because it doesn't fit HIM and not because it's not a guyish thing to do.
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So, thoughts and opinions? where do you fall on this spectrum?
(Personally, I think I'm about 5/8 traditonal writer, because I tend to create in this order. Worldbuilding and large scale plot, characters, and their personal story arc through the major events of the world.)
Asterales, I do not want to barge into your away-from-computer life, but maaan, going by your posts from the last two days, you need more sleep. :(I always need sleep. ;D Your comment made me realize, that while it's unfortunate most of you seem to start posting here, when I am supposed to have been asleep for some hours, doesn't actually stop me from going to bed! (Also, exams coming up. Oh, no! *cries*) So I'm not very active at the moment :P
So here's another thing to consider: are you really sure your character would "never do that"? There are so very many reasons/excuses I can think of for seemingly OOC behavior, but I'll use Minna's own example of Onni from the (fairly) recent pages. When he showed up, people were saying, "Minna wouldn't have Onni act so OOC!" After page 451 (http://sssscomic.com/comic.php?page=451), they stopped saying it, because she demonstrated that it was a struggle for him to act so OOC.
Tew way that I've personally found works best for worldbuilding is: take some other author setting, find a barely elaborated upon locale/historical reference and then build the story there. Goal is that the constraints imposed on you by the existing universe should make it easier to work on the elements that your plot/characters actually need. Once you got those necessary setting details, you can start separating your "extended universe" for the originals author's.
Then again, sometimes I design a world I think is original only to realize that I unwittingly took inspiration from things that I like. And I'm not talking small things, like name of the character looking kinda similar if you squint - I mean huge elephants in the room that I should've noticed much earlier. For an example, the thing I'm currently building has, among others, two gods, one of which is a bird-themed mischievious deity of magic and future-sight who has blue as his colour, and the other a crazy berserker war-god with "KILLKILLKILL" mentality and red colour motif. It took me three weeks to realize that their description is virtually identical to that of two gods from W40K, my second favourite fandom I'm spending way too much time thinking about.Yes, and sometimes I come up with something, let it lie a bit, and someone comes up with something eerily similar in the meantime, meaning no one will believe I came up with my idea myself. As an example, in 1998 or so, I came up with a setting that has many similarities to the 'Verse from Firefly. Do I think Joss Whedon broke into my computer and took notes? No. Can I publish the stories featuring that setting? Not without a major rewrite. *Sigh*
Ever happened to you?
Yes, and sometimes I come up with something, let it lie a bit, and someone comes up with something eerily similar in the meantime, meaning no one will believe I came up with my idea myself. As an example, in 1998 or so, I came up with a setting that has many similarities to the 'Verse from Firefly. Do I think Joss Whedon broke into my computer and took notes? No. Can I publish the stories featuring that setting? Not without a major rewrite. *Sigh*
Reminds me of that time I wrote this one fanfic, finished posting it and then watched Mad Max: Fury Road several weeks after. "Wait a minute..."I'm in a weird position in regards to that, as I don't watch many modern movies, but am active on the internet and talk to people who do. So I have subliminal exposure to all different elements on them. It makes me really watch what I write, and also lead to a bunch of people either telling em to watchrelated movies, or telling me Not to watch related movies. It's weird at times.
Though in that case it was a lot of weird parallel plot points I noticed rather than setting.
princeofdoom: I know this might not be exactly related but I was really strongly reminded of the three writer types (http://delphina2k.tumblr.com/post/110735180378/the-crocodile-hunter-style-of-writing-involves)... :D... Gardener. Definitively ^^
... Gardener. Definitively ^^
For example, what is the yarn for this and that cloth made of? What are its characteristics? If there is a percentage of this or that much metal thread in it, how heavy would a garment made of x meters of this cloth be? How costly in terms of money and time would it be? Who could likely still afford it?
... I have no idea. I'm the person who wrestles the crocodiles into fertilizer for my garden outside my new building...Interesting way to define yourself ^^
A lot of Early Japanese culture did have its base in borrowings from Chinese culture. So depending on the period that's from it would make a lot of sense.:D Oooh, three genders?
I'm working on clothing ideas right now for a humanoid species with different ideals of appearance for three separate sexes/genders and while I have some inspiration from certain cultures, I don't have anything concrete yet.
Then again, concrete clothing would be EXTREMELY heavy, so that might be for the best.
Also there was that thing in Japanese writing of brevity and implication. Have you ever read a short poem called 'The Jewel Stairs Grievance'? It's very short but not a word is wasted, and the whole story is implied in brief descriptions.
Edit: I keep thinking of that particular poem as Japanese, but it is in fact Chinese (Li Po, I think). Probably confused because the guy who translated it into English was himself working from a Japanese translation, and it shows! But same idea with a lot of Japanese poetry. It's very minimalist!
That's not a bad quality to have at all, actually, even if it does hinder the writing process. Knowing your facts and how things work can be crucial for creating something believable. A friend of mine once made me read a hilariously bad novel that was set in supposed Heian era Japan, and it had a scene where a noblewoman screamed something akin to "I - can't - STAND - this - anymore!" and dashed out of the room.
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I'll have to kick my butt this fall and participate in NaNoWriMo!Yes ! :D Join us !
Q: While we are (still somewhat) on the topic of clothes, how important do you all think different clothing styles are to a setting? In terms of distinguishing cultures/ethnicities? Do you think it might be an overused technique or is it actually an effective way to make a point?
I like to use different styles for different cultures, but at the same time I sometimes wonder if it wouldn't be nicer (and more realistic) to have disputes between groups of people that dress the same and prefer the same kind of housing and generally share a culture.
Culture can be a fount of dispute, but who says cultures don't start do develop only after a group has split?
Hmm. Convincing arguments, Róisín and AierdomeWell... I confess I haven't done much with clothing. But this feel relevant to a story of mine, about a small religion whose adherents can swap minds. The protagonist decides to leave home, and essentially swap with the furthest person they can find. And so, from a secluded winter highland, where almost everyone is in the religion, she finds herself in a massive trading town that fancies itself the hub of the world. It's Mediterranean, and cosmopolitain, and there are very few walkers, very few people who understand the sheer amount of distance across cultures she travelled. Plus she finds that the previous occupant of her body was involved in the local politics, something completely beyond her grasp.
I can agree with you on all of them.
I think enemy stereotypes are often far to clear cut. I don't like the feel of otherness or exoticism, that tends to go on in Fantasy a lot. Sometimes so much so, that you think the only reason an author chose a clothing style, is to veritably scream in the face of the reader: "There! Take that! It is refreshing and original and so different from the protagonist's culture! Do you feel the mysterious aura, the titillation?!"
Maybe, what makes me dislike it so much is not only that it can feel forced on the side of the author, when taken too far. It is also what we expect to find in novels, so it might be interesting to see something different for once (although, of course it is this prevalent in literature, because it is quite natural in real life, too).
The most annoying is, that clothing styles are usually generalized and then apparently uniformly applied to all members of a group, when really, it should be used like in the examples you gave above, Róisín - to individualize, characterize and give insight into the personality of one person, even if that person also belongs to a certain caste.
*thinks about this some more*
I got into an interesting conversation on the bus the other day.
It was about OC culture versus the writing culture before the internet. I tried to break it down as follows.
OC culture sprung up collaboratively, based on the freedom of the internet, and tend to be completely character driven. The characters often have intricate back stories, as a result of all the narrative they have participated in. When newly created their backstories often tend to be referential, whether to some common standard so that they are 'compatible' with as many other OCs that share that standard, or refering back to other events in the creator's narratives. Often there is much greater projection of the author onto the OC, and they grow organically through interaction with other authors and characters.
By contrast, traditional writing is far less character focused. The plot tends to be first to be created, though a character may serve as inspiration for a plot. The characters are designed to fit the story, and are often much more specialized than a comparable OC, as the character isn't necessarily designed to be transportable. The character will have as much back story as the author wants, including less than the minimum needed for an OC, which has to be able to stand somewhat separated from it's world. The character tend to grow, but along the lines of the story. Adapting more to the plot, than the plot to it.
To summarize, OCC is about the joy of telling A story, making something together that is more than the sum of it's particpants.
TW is about telling THE story, perfecting a narrative to the best ones abilities, with as great a control and finesse as the author can muster.
That was the definition/comparison I proposed, and I have been thinking about it a lot. For one thing, like most things, it's probably a lot less binary and more of a spectrum. For another, I haven't really done much in the OC style, so I'm speaking as outsider/observer, and would appreciate feedback.
So, thoughts and opinions? where do you fall on this spectrum?
(Personally, I think I'm about 5/8 traditional writer, because I tend to create in this order. World-building and large scale plot, characters, and their personal story arc through the major events of the world.)
Soooo... question for you all!Well… I'd still say it comes down to the why of the scene. Why are they all there? Why is each one there, individually? That should determine who does what and when, more than anything. If a character stays in the background, maybe there's a reason. And even when a character doesn't speak, you can document their reaction.
How do you deal with writing more than two characters at once? Any specific strategies?
I've found that when I'm writing three or more characters in an extended scene together, it's difficult to make sure that nobody disappears into the background. Ensuring that everyone has an equal presence (in scenes where everybody is supposed to have an equal presence) is like pulling teeth.
Does anybody else find this challenging? It might be just one of those things that I need to chip away at until it becomes easier, but... ehh.
Soooo... question for you all!At long as you don't forgot the third character on your scene, all is fine ? ^^ (On my finished novel, at a moment, I have a animal. And a beta-reader who asked some pages later "And, where is it now ? Because I see no more mention of it." Oups ? ::)) As LooNEY_DAC said, even is someone isn't speaking, you can show her/his reactions to the reader, proving this character is listening. Or not listening maybe. Maybe this third character will interrupt the two others. Maybe they look at the third at a moment. You have a lot of possibilities to maintain a link with a character who doesn't speak yet and the reader :) And it's not because one or several characters are a little more in the background that they are less important. A character can also begin in the background and reveal how important she/he is later too.
How do you deal with writing more than two characters at once? Any specific strategies?
I've found that when I'm writing three or more characters in an extended scene together, it's difficult to make sure that nobody disappears into the background. Ensuring that everyone has an equal presence (in scenes where everybody is supposed to have an equal presence) is like pulling teeth.
Does anybody else find this challenging? It might be just one of those things that I need to chip away at until it becomes easier, but... ehh.
Select a set of characters:I'm not giving you a lot.
-Sheyla, Robert, and Robert's mother, Madam Darhurst
You can try to pull off the omniscient storytelling style, but I don't think it works very well. It's better to have one POV character per scene and not break that chosen POV.Ah ? :-[
Ah ? :-[
No, I'm the one sorry, Aierdome :) My reaction wasn't precise enough. It's just... the omniscient kind had always been my way to write ? I don't pretend I'm talented at all with that, but... I don't know, it never seemed so difficult for me ?
I'm not giving you a lot.
They have to find "The Golden Carrot of Lore" to get rid of a pesky ghost haunting their front door porch.
Try to make this one dark violet, if you'd like to.
Alrighty! I finally finished the prompt! Check it out. (http://jethanslair.blogspot.com/2016/02/the-doorbell-ringer.html) It ended up being 1680 words, so I figured it was better to post it on my blog. My handwritten version was longer, but I changed a few things when I typed it. As for colors, it feels more like gold and pink, rather than dark violet.It was fabulous :D I really like the dialogue, there so many lines that made me laugh!
It was fabulous :D I really like the dialogue, there so many lines that made me laugh!
How is your writer's block? Any better?
Oh, I'm so sorry, Mélusine! I was out with a fever for a bit and mostly slept during the last two days :( Now I'm just snotty ;)I usually go for first person POV because I find it easier to connect with the characters that way. When I try writing 3rd person, the characters and writing are mechanical. I'm working on it though!
I like the omniscient POV for fairytales a lot, but for longer stories I want to relate to one or more of the characters, so I agree with Airedome that the omniscient POV is mostly more difficult to read, if not to write.
Sometimes I like the first person POV, but usually the random thoughts popping up and other things that I haven't been able to pinpoint, make me lose my suspension of disbelief. It's probably the same reason I don't like characters' thoughts written out in (limited) third person POV. They can tell other characters about it, or voice it out loud to an empty room, but please don't try to make me believe I can look inside the head of another human/animal/alien/plant when I have trouble knowing what is going on in my own head.
Then again, there are always exceptions and it really depends on the writer and the story what works and what doesn't (and the reader of course). Thankfully, we are all different in our abilities and likes!
It's really interesting to see how many approaches and experiences with different styles are out there.
Q: I have a question that might be a tad existentialist.
Why do y'all write? What made you start? Was there a certain event or did you always just like it?
What is the first thing you can remember writing?
It's really interesting to see how many approaches and experiences with different styles are out there.
Q: I have a question that might be a tad existentialist.
Why do y'all write? What made you start? Was there a certain event or did you always just like it?
What is the first thing you can remember writing?
Why do y'all write? What made you start? Was there a certain event or did you always just like it?I began to write when I understood I was now able to read stories by myself AND to create mine. A few years after, I assume the "real" answer to a "Why are you writing ?" would have been a "To stay alive.", but I wasn't able to understand it. Today, writing is for me something as normal as breathing, and I have stories living inside my head I want/need to put on the paper, because... how to explain... they "deserve" to be shared even if I'm frightened every time I let someone enter inside one of my stories. Sharing them make them live a little further, and if I had good time with the characters, maybe some other persons could like them and like to follow their story too ? Also, if I don't write at all or don't work on a project even a little, there is a problem somewhere.
What is the first thing you can remember writing?
five girls leaving home under shady circumstances (they were going to fight in a war! they were fourteen! Ten year old me thought that was a lot!)Fourteen, a perfect age to act like that when you're yourself a young teenager ::) *Had had similar things*
It's really interesting to see how many approaches and experiences with different styles are out there.
Q: I have a question that might be a tad existentialist.
Why do y'all write? What made you start? Was there a certain event or did you always just like it?
What is the first thing you can remember writing?
When it comes to HP Fanfiction I am a complete philistine. The only work I am familiar with is the almost indescribable My Immortal.My Immortal is a work of art. Words cannot do it justice.
Years after its creation debate still rages over whether it's the worst fanfic ever written, or a brilliant piece of trollery disguised as the worst fanfic ever written. It's so horrible that it goes beyond bad, blazes through so bad it's good into so bad it's unreadable, powers through there into just bad again and then finally crashes like a radioactive, dinosaur killing comet back into so bad it's good and utterly destroys it.
The first time I read it I laughed so hard I hyperventillated for ten minutes and almost passed out.
You can attempt to read it here (http://myimmortal.wikia.com/wiki/My_Immortal/Chapters_1-11), but be warned - it features sex scenes, drug scenes, casual self harm, spelling that would make Webster stab out his eyes and burn down a library, My Chemical Romance, Dumbledore in an Avril Lavigne cloak and (for some reason) Tom Bombadil.
Ragnarok, that has the promise of a good tale. The atmosphere reminds me of early Michael Moorcock. That's a compliment.
So...I started writing this a year ago as a prank for my Creative Writing teacher, who forgot to specify the length of the piece we should turn in for Midterm. A whole lot of editing and world-building later, and this resulted. Still unfinished, but I will update as much as I can.Not bad so far, seems like a pretty standard fantasy epic, but certainly one that I would read. Have you ever read the Wheel of Time? I'm picking up very strong Perrin Aybara vibes in your blacksmith.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OgTbjepUbnlnYXtM0P2uKDvWWOjgE83u3DQBmXobY1w/edit?usp=sharing (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OgTbjepUbnlnYXtM0P2uKDvWWOjgE83u3DQBmXobY1w/edit?usp=sharing)
Anybody have good tips for writing dialogue? That's by far my biggest weakness as a writer. I've tried to listen carefully to how people talk in everyday conversation but it never comes out right on paper.
I've actually heard that you don't want to write exactly how people irl talk, because it comes out very messy; false starts, stuttering, changing trains of thought in the middle of a sentence, forgetting words. That isn't to say that listening to real life people won't help, but don't try to make your characters talk like real people. Try to have your characters talk like people think they talk or how they wish they talked.Moving the story forward without being distracting in its own right. Thanks, that makes more sense!
Even if you have a character with a stutter, it's better to leave most of that in the speech tags. Instead of:
"I-I-I-I was j-just go-going t-to th-the st-tore," she said.
it might be better to write
"I-I-I-I was just going t-to the tore," she said/stuttered.
And even then that might be too much really. And remember that just like everything in the story, the dialogue is there to move the story forward or tell us something about the characters or world.
Anybody have good tips for writing dialogue? That's by far my biggest weakness as a writer. I've tried to listen carefully to how people talk in everyday conversation but it never comes out right on paper.I'm not sure I have advices, but for pity's sake, don't write dialogues with characters saying just "Yes.", "No.", or worst, "...", and all should be fine.
I'm not sure I have advices, but for pity's sake, don't write dialogues with characters saying just "Yes.", "No.", or worst, "...", and all should be fine.Should I laugh or cry? I don't know :-\
Should I laugh or cry? I don't know :-\Errr... did I said something I shouldn't have said ? :-[ If yes, it wasn't my intention.
Errr... did I said something I shouldn't have said ? :-[ If yes, it wasn't my intention.No, just something very, very true! :)
I'd like some input regarding the best point to start telling my story. For reference, the action starts when the MC is about 18(!) There are four possibilities:If I were you, I would cut out option 1 (6-7) entirely. It would start the story off slowly and be really hard to pull off without seeming like a massive infodump and/or filler. Maybe have 8-9 be in a short prologue: introducing everything while keeping it brief enough to keep the audience's interest. Then, start Part 1 at 12-13 and go from there.Spoiler: for it is really rather long show
I'd like some input regarding the best point to start telling my story. For reference, the action starts when the MC is about 18(!) There are four possibilities:
Do you usually write plans for chapters? And what information do you use to draw up these plans?I have done that for the last NaNo, in order to try to balance my chapters. I was simply writing the big things supposed to happen, resumed in one sentence, and trying to have three of them, not more, by chapter. But this is maybe an university's habit...
What do you feel when you give what you've written to someone, or post it for the persons who write things like fanfictions ? I'm always so nervous, I'm curious to know if it's common or not so much :)
What do you feel when you give what you've written to someone, or post it for the persons who write things like fanfictions ? I'm always so nervous, I'm curious to know if it's common or not so much :)
Totally, absolutely, completely nervous. I basically feel like I'm going to die every time.I don't know if I must feel relieved ("I'm not the only one") or not. For me, it's mostly a "and it will be as if they were seeing inside of me, what had I in mind when I talked about the fact I'm writing and said yes for giving something to read ?"
Actually, now that I think about it, it depends whether I give it to someone "in person" (for example, mailing it to a friend I know "in flesh") or post publicly. In the first case, I'm more like "did you read it already? what do you think? what did I do wrong?" and I have to stop myself from heaving all of those questions on the person the day after I sent the thing out. But when I post it online... "oh gosh they're going to hate it and it's terrible and they'll bash it and I've commited a terrible piece of writing..."That's strange to have both the opposite reactions :) When someone tell me how the reading was, I'm always wondering how to disappear under the floor, right now please. And they're persons I know at least a little ! (One day, one of my beta-reader sent me a message on facebook, saying something like "I've finished iiiiiiit !" less than 48 hours after having the novel (something around 230 pages). The only stupid reaction I had been able to have was closing the page and trying to not panic more than what I was already doing ^^°)
Completely unrealistic, I know, but try to tell this to my nerves. ;)
That's strange to have both the opposite reactions :) When someone tell me how the reading was, I'm always wondering how to disappear under the floor, right now please. And they're persons I know at least a little ! (One day, one of my beta-reader sent me a message on facebook, saying something like "I've finished iiiiiiit !" less than 48 hours after having the novel (something around 230 pages). The only stupid reaction I had been able to have was closing the page and trying to not panic more than what I was already doing ^^°)
I think for me this disparity in reactions comes from the fact that people I know in real life will "soften the blow", so to speak, when I do something wrong, and attempt some constructive critique because, well, they care. On the other hand, many online strangers - especially in places like FF.net, AO3 seems to have somewhat "healthier" community - will be less... restrained, and if something will be wrong (or worse, offending their fandom nerve), they'll be much more open about the critique, and frankly, you'll never know what kind of a reader you'll encounter, which can't be said for people I ask to read my thing personally.Oh. I understand better :) I have no experience in FF.net or AO3.
What do you feel when you give what you've written to someone, or post it for the persons who write things like fanfictions ? I'm always so nervous, I'm curious to know if it's common or not so much :)When I posted my first fics (almost a year ago now, how times change) I would make it the last thing I did during the day so I could just go to bed without having to spend the rest of the day waiting for people to tell me how awful they were. (One unexpected but lovely upside of this is you wake up to nice comments!) I was always nervous and every time I posted I was convinced that this was it, this would be the one that made everyone turn round and go "you know what, we're sick of trying to be nice, please just stop".
So, this is part of the reason that my main/"real" fic archive is on Dreamwidth, not Ao3. There aren't any stat counters, and user subscriptions do not exist - aside from the Reading List, and there are ways to prevent entries from appearing on people's reading lists, even if they are subscribed to you. So, I am way more comfortable with that - posting there makes me feel like I'm putting something in my own space, and that I'm not imposing on anybody. Even though people can see it, it feels "private" somehow, because they need to seek my writing out directly in order to see it, instead of just coming across it randomly while browsing.I'm in two minds about AO3's kudos and view counters. On the one hand they can be useful, and I'm not going to lie and say that seeing "this list of people left kudos" at the bottom isn't a nice thing to see. On the other, if a good fic gets few kudos for whatever reason it'll just slip through the cracks because people will assume it's not worth their time, and the whole thing sometimes feels to me a bit too much like a popularity contest.
When I posted my first fics (almost a year ago now, how times change) I would make it the last thing I did during the day so I could just go to bed without having to spend the rest of the day waiting for people to tell me how awful they were.
I'm in two minds about AO3's kudos and view counters. On the one hand they can be useful, and I'm not going to lie and say that seeing "this list of people left kudos" at the bottom isn't a nice thing to see. On the other, if a good fic gets few kudos for whatever reason it'll just slip through the cracks because people will assume it's not worth their time, and the whole thing sometimes feels to me a bit too much like a popularity contest.
I've definitely seen this with larger fandoms, yeah. Not so much this one - then again, it's possible I'm just oblivious (especially since I'm determined to read literally everything posted, even if it's taking a while). I keep coming across people who use kudos to sort, and it just seems to odd to me - because there are so many reasons that a particular story could have a higher number than another (it was one of the first fics posted, or it's a very popular pairing, or it's an AU that lots of people like, or it was recced somewhere, or....)
I was a bit nervous about posting, myself. Still am, somewhat. This is both my first online fandom, and the first time I have written fanfic for anything. Most of what I've ever had published had been in physical anthologies, magazines or newspapers, and writing online was a whole new and terrifying field. I was familiar with the 'shared universe' concept from decades of involvement in the filk community and SF fandom, but had never written for one (though I'm thinking, now that I know at least somewhat, how to do it online, about the '163..' shared world. Fanfic seems to be a variant of shared universe, and an interesting one.
Seeing one's work online is a very different sensation to seeing it in physical print, I can tell you. It seems somehow.....less controlled? Playing in another writer's world is also a little strange, as is the care needed to keep my work at least roughly within canon, which I try to do, for courtesy. I like, and find myself sharing, SectoBoss's concept of inserting one's stories into the cracks in the Minnaverse, so they fit seamlessly.
I don't know much about how people sort what they want to read. Not yet as familiar as I would wish to be with the customs and usage of the online world. And my huge issues with the technology and the mechanisms of posting don't help!
OwlsG0: Yeah, I have a few fics on the Scriptorium. There was one I did for the Secret Santa, and posted to the Scriptorium afterward, about Reynir trying to re-invent coffee with a little help from Lalli. Then there was a three-parter which I started around the same time (early/mid January this year) 'Gone Astray', in which Emil's scepticism about magic is somewhat strained.
I have three parts of what is intended to be a five-part fic over on A3O, where I write as 'Tanist'. (The different name over there is because my efforts to sign up there as 'Róisín' were utterly unsuccessful. Whether this was because they already have that name ascribed to someone else in their system, or because my early attempts to sign up there partially worked, godsonlyknow, but their system won't let me use it. I'm not too displeased though, because when I gave up on using it and was wondering what else to try
Ah, so you're the Tanist? Yes, then, I have seen you on the website before. That site is really hard to format on, isn't it? I still haven't figured out how the heck to do italics and all that stuff.
It uses basic HTML. So, similar to BBCode, but not quite the same. As far as I know, there isn't a rich-text option at all (though one might exist - possible. I'd never use it.)
If you do a search for how to do text formatting in HTML, you should be able to find it pretty easily. I just hand-code everything as I write, but then again, I'm used to it.
That character writer feel when you suddenly have an idea for a scene or short story, but you don't have characters for it. WHO ARE YOU PEOPLE? WHAT DO YOU WANT FROM ME?What I do generally is just write the idea with bland, placeholder characters then make the characters interesting once the plot is down on paper.
What I do generally is just write the idea with bland, placeholder characters then make the characters interesting once the plot is down on paper.
On other news, I was re-reading an old CampNaNo project and.Hey, Nimphy, I think you're approximatively the same age as me when an adult had explained to me why this couldn't happen like that in my story, and that needed to change, and that too. Part of the "why" had made me blush like I never had blushed. I was too young. I sounded strange, or inappropriate, because I was young and in a lack of life experience. (Which doesn't means you have to fight or see a mutilated body !) BUT I was writing, and it could only become better :) Write. Don't lose faith. It will become better.
Why do my violent and/or dramatic scenes between characters sound like the characters doing inappropriate things, like really, I'm just trying to get them to look like normal people fighting or having a complete breakdown when they see a mutilated body or something like that.
How do you people even manage, I literally can't begin a story from the plot. It HAS to begin from characters, and then I get stuck because I have characters and a setting but... I can't plot. I literally don't know how to write an interesting plot.
Piney, yep, that would be the problem. Little innocent me writes things, growing-up me realizes that the world is not such a simple place and things must be corrected.
How do you people even manage, I literally can't begin a story from the plot. It HAS to begin from characters, and then I get stuck because I have characters and a setting but... I can't plot. I literally don't know how to write an interesting plot.
Lazy8 > I don't know if that helps but, this would be a very good opportunity to play with a character who's doing bad things for good reasons, whose actions are well meaning but misguided, to explore the discrepancy that can exists between "acting in a good/right/moral way" and "not causing unnecessary suffering".
Lazy8, I think you might have touched on the solution yourself. :) Maybe, just as a practice or something for fun to do for yourself at the moment, play around with this premise as a fanfic. Perhaps this is something that's happened after Year 0, for example, something that's experienced all over the known world or only in one country? And then the OCs will come trickling in. It'll be a nice little trap to get those OCs to show themselves! Hope this helps!
Also: what a neat idea! :D
Lazy8 > I don't know if that helps but, this would be a very good opportunity to play with a character who's doing bad things for good reasons, whose actions are well meaning but misguided, to explore the discrepancy that can exists between "acting in a good/right/moral way" and "not causing unnecessary suffering".
Lazy8: I don't know how helpful this would be, but I tend to draw from myself and the people around me for characters. If you lived in this society, how would you feel? How would you prepare? How would your friends react to it similarly or differently? Etc. etc. etc...
Tangentially, I'm reminded of that character in Pratchett who, when one of the witches shows her her true nature, rather than collapsing in a sobbing heap and repenting of her evil and murderous ways, glories in it and insists she would have been twice as evil had the opportunity occurred.
I much prefer villains or antagonists who have, or believe they have, a perfectly valid and consistent reason for what they do.
It's always refreshing when a character or an author defies conventions. For example, I really do like Pratchett because he was always doing his own thing, and nuts to what the rest of the literary world used in stories. His were not so formulaic, and you really got the sense you were reading something original.
The villains of stories are always the most difficult to accomplish, I think, because it means working with a set of values which are alien to most of us. And there's always the pressure to make the villain distinct in some way- for example, loveable, as seems to be popular in Hollywood these days (ie: Loki from Avengers), or too damned sophisticated for their own good (ie: every Bond villain ever). In writing, it is so much easier to encounter villains who are just villainous, like Hannibal Lecter, Voldemort and a personal favourite, that crazy Mrs Danvers from 'Rebecca'.
I much prefer villains or antagonists who have, or believe they have, a perfectly valid and consistent reason for what they do.I've also really enjoyed this too, it's much more realistic. Most people in real life sees themselves as the 'good guy' and thinks what they do has justifiable causes and is the right thing, even if it's not. I want an antagonist who feels human and who I can relate to, I feel like it just gives the story more depth.
I put something (https://ssssforum.com/index.php?topic=856.msg102398#msg102398) up on the SSSS AU Thread that probably should be linked here.
Ah hmm so years ago I used to be super into creative writing and did it all the time and really loved it, but the past several years I've been bombarded with schoolwork that's taken away a lot of my timeand abilityto be creative. But with graduation coming up in just a few weeks I'm looking forward to using my extra free time to get serious again about doing creative things including writing, so I guess what I'm asking and sorry if this has already been touched on and I missed it, does anyone have tips for getting back into writing and digging back up the buried creativity and skill ?
What I need is something preventing the initial killing and then an opportunity to have a proper scuffle. But the assassin simply slipping or tripping just doesn't sit right with me... :-\
Hear hear on that. Whenever a deus-ex-machina like that is pulled out at the last second, it makes me roll my eyes. Unless the assassin has already proved themselves to be a little bit clumsy, then what are the odds they will slip up at the most crucial moment of their mission? Lazy writing. Bad characterisation.Exactly.
I always feel like the solution to the final battle should be introduced, progressed and developed along with the characters towards the start of the story. It doesn't have to be overt- just a simple comment about it will suffice, but unless there has been some comprehensive development, or the solution naturally makes sense in context, the final battle triumph will feel cheap and easily won.
Hmm. Using the element of luck is about the only possibility I can think of, given the specs. Something that came to my mind though was goldsmiths and injuries; when a goldsmith has a serious injury at work it tends to always happen to someone with years and years of experience under their belt, not to someone new to the craft. The worst injuries almost always happen to those for whom the job is such a routine that they get absent-minded for a second and chop. Perhaps the assassin is someone with much experience and (especially if they're aware how easy their target is to kill) just... forgets some important safety detail, thinking they're in for an easy routine task?That's a good point. Sonja Fischer, the German hairdresser world championship winner, seems to have a weakness for cutting off parts of her own fingers, because she gets ahead of herself... ::)
[…]These are all really good ideas! :D
Astarles can I ask what MC's name is? If you have one?I do have a name. But it isn't a pre-existing one, because for some reason I just can't handle 'real' names in Fantasy stories. So it doesn't have a meaning per se. At some point I decided it's the name of a weather phenomenon that brings the first rain (as opposed to snow) of the year, but since it won't be brought up in the story, it's a moot point.
I always have a hard time naming people permanently because I prefer to know the meanings of names and such before I go on to use them. Because of this, one of the MCs of a story under-works ended up with the ridiculous nickname 'Twig' from her surname.
Congratulate me? :D
How is 'Souse' pronounced? The look of it kind of reminds me of the nickname for the Spanish name Jesus- which is Soos, as any Gravity Falls fan will know.
(...)
Currently, I'm writing a piece that involves characters named Malene, Nymph, Santi, Little Trout and Siamak.
So that kind of gives some perspective on just how weird names can go when I'm inspired. Not that Siamak is weird- it's Iranian.
So how do you all go about finding a good name? What makes a character name off-putting or ensnaring? Is it even possible to achieve this with a name alone? Do you like to have the name match the personality or do you make a point of it being in stark contrast to each other? What is your stance on apostrophes and the like in Fantasy names? Do you like telling names?Interesting question... I think characters often come to me with their names ; but sometimes, we both realize, months after, that the name doesn't fit. Enora wasn't Enora first, but Cami had always been Cami, and they came to me not together but nearly. Some other times, I have good surprises with meaning of names. I was particularly happy with Elowan, and Siloée (from Siloé). The only time it took me weeks to find a character's name was for Anei, who was here as a character but nameless ; I mixed some sounds from Celtic names because nothing seemed correct. I'm patient, think I'll know the good name someday even if I have to change it in a whole novel, and don't try to make names match personality *Shrugs* Characters do what they want with their names ^^ I don't like the idea a name should define a personality.
And this doesn't only concern characters, right?
Do you have specialized techniques for naming places or do you just go with whatever pops into your mind first?
As for the names, I admit I often start with regular ones and modify them to sound more fantasy-ish. For example, Eric -> Eriac, Sandra -> Sanra, Alice -> Alis (funnily enough, Alis is a guy) Darius -> Darys. Others come from words I heard that sound nice to me - Tristar -> Trisar, Sousa -> Souse, Silan -> Cilane. And finally, a lot of names come from me trying out various sounds and looking for something I'd like. It helps me to say them out-loud.Distort names is also a good method ;)
Like Susan, but without "n" and with "eh" sound instead of "a". Or Suzette without "tte" part. And yeah, I agree with what you say about common names in fantasy stories - I find it weird that a character from something like a fantasy story with dragons would have name like Jack or Jane. For me, it always kills any immersion I'd have in the story and reminds me I'm still reading a book. Makes the story less... real somehow.
While we're at it, I like the name Siamak.
So what do you feel her wishes should be? Feel free to add character traits or bits of information if they relate to the wishesOoh, sounds cool! :))
Thank you !! See, I think for any fantasy setting there should always be rules in place for the magic, or at least some sort of limitations unless they're as you said a bunch of immortals or something but even then I feel like there's gotta be limits. I suppose I was talking more along the lines of would it still have the same laws, rules, and physics our world has without really any magic, normal just thousands of years in the future, or if I want to blend in aspect of something mystic and not scientifically accurate ya know ? But as I said the mystic and not scientifically accurate is just so much more fun.
Ohhhhh yes yes I agree, inheritance series is a good example of a good magic system despite its other flaws. I still have yet to read the last book and even though it'll probably make me feel like a 12 year old I still plan on it eventually.
I happened to finish the series in Paris and had a lot of French questions directed to me, as to why I was sobbing over a closed book. I can assure you the last book will make you feel like a kid and if you were like me, re-live an obsessive crush on Murtagh.
Ohhh do I want to go far enough into the future where noticeable evolutionary changes have happened with some of the flora and fauna ?? That might be kind of fun but I don't know if I know enough about biology to do that . .
Because the first character, the idea of them being the last of something that was genocide'd off sounds almost mary-sue-ish to me I might combine that character with the trickster imp-ish one and make them one in the same. I feel like it might be harder to classify a character as a mary sue when they're a mischievous insufferable little pain :P
Aw heck yes I had a weird little crush on Murtagh too and I am SO ready to relive that
I admit I wouldn't say that the character being the last of his kind would instantly throw the character into Mary Sue territory, not even close. At contrary, I believe most Mary Sues are decribed as being insufferable pains, though the idea of the character being trickster imp who's last of his kind sounds pretty interesting. Also, I like those plot ideas you're throwing about. Sounds like bare bones of some interesting story (the trickster imp embarking on a journey with wax/wayne OCs while the genocidal person and deep research person pursue them? At any rate, interesting).Ah really ? See when I think of a Mary Sue I think of someone who's perfect and lovable by everyone else in universe, there's a huge emphasis on how lovable they are by everyone around them except anyone who's jealous or threatened by them, for example the very infamous Mary Sue Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way (http://myimmortal.wikia.com/wiki/My_Immortal). So I figure a way to avoid making someone a Mary Sue is to make them more flawed and believable, although yeah, you're right some flaws really can contribute to a character's Mary Sue-ishness so it's important to pick and choose what flaws or drawbacks you give them and how you present them.
Ah really ? See when I think of a Mary Sue I think of someone who's perfect and lovable by everyone else in universe, there's a huge emphasis on how lovable they are by everyone around them except anyone who's jealous or threatened by them, for example the very infamous Mary Sue Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way (http://myimmortal.wikia.com/wiki/My_Immortal). So I figure a way to avoid making someone a Mary Sue is to make them more flawed and believable, although yeah, you're right some flaws really can contribute to a character's Mary Sue-ishness so it's important to pick and choose what flaws or drawbacks you give them and how you present them.
But ahhh yeah the plan is to make the twins allied with 'last of their kind trickster impish' which is also why I want to make the twins pretty lawful good and upright to kind of act as a foil to trickster imp.
Thanks for all of the tips and info, that's all really helpful ! I've heard of Brandon Sanderson before but now my interest is piqued a bit more.
Yes yes yes. *nods* I have lots and lots of Things to Say on the subject of Mary Sues, having kept more than a few of them myself back during my early writing days.Yes thank you, I agree 1000,000% that fans are unfortunately more likely to cry 'Mary Sue !' at competent and likable female characters while kind of just shrugging of male characters who perfectly fit the mold. Luke Skywalker is actually a perfect example, especially going on the fact that many people would define a Mary Sue as a self insert character who is some sort of wish fulfillment on the behalf of the author / creator. Mark Hamill has even said that he's positive Luke Skywalker was supposed to be a self insert for George Lucas ::) it always did bug me with both Luke Skywalker and Aang how quickly they progressed through their training and as adolescents were able to take down much older and more competent villains who'd been training for decades and decades, even though I especially liked Aang a lot as a character.
First of all, I've seen some deeply flawed characters *cough* Goku *cough* who were still Mary Sues - not because they were perfect, but because of the way they were treated by the narrative, getting let off the hook for some of their worst and most despicable character flaws in ways that none of the other characters were, and almost always being chosen to solve the cast's problems even when another character might have been better suited to the task.
There's also an unfortunate trend toward crying "Mary Sue!" at any canon female character who shows the slightest hint of competence, while not subjecting male characters to standards that are anywhere near as rigorous. Just as an example, here's a list of canon characters I can think of off the top of my head that would be scored at Mary Sues by the standards of most litmus tests:
- Son Goku (Dragon Ball Z): Most powerful person
on the planetin the universein the multiverse including the afterlife, one of the last surviving members of his kind, always saves the day, every single one of his enemies or rivals ends up either liking him or dead, character flaws swept under the rug- Luke Skywalker (Star Wars): Unusually powerful by the standards of his own universe, has a connection to the villain that makes said villain obsessed with him, defeats said villain with minimal training
- Aang (Avatar: the Last Airbender): The Chosen One, last surviving member of his people, masters a skillset in a matter of months that took most of his predecessors over a decade
...and again, those are only a few I can think of offhand. With the exception of Goku, I didn't take major issue with any of these characters. Just thinking out loud at this point, but I think the difference between a real Mary Sue and a false positive on the litmus test is how their flaws are treated in-universe, and whether they're allowed to develop.
And I also think that's a good way to put it, yeah, not just how the flaws are handled in universe but allowing character growth and development through those flaws is super important in making more believable and real characters.
Yes thank you, I agree 1000,000% that fans are unfortunately more likely to cry 'Mary Sue !' at competent and likable female characters while kind of just shrugging of male characters who perfectly fit the mold. Luke Skywalker is actually a perfect example, especially going on the fact that many people would define a Mary Sue as a self insert character who is some sort of wish fulfillment on the behalf of the author / creator. Mark Hamill has even said that he's positive Luke Skywalker was supposed to be a self insert for George Lucas ::) it always did bug me with both Luke Skywalker and Aang how quickly they progressed through their training and as adolescents were able to take down much older and more competent villains who'd been training for decades and decades, even though I especially liked Aang a lot as a character.
So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?Ooh, I was planning a reread anyway, so why not!
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
EDIT: See below for list of links.
Monstrously long link set (so spoilered):Spoiler: deviantart links show
How would you like to have any feedback we might have sent back to you? Google docs, or what?I edited the OP to answer, but will say here: whatever you want.
Hi! This is kind of a weird request, buuuuuuuuuuttt this is the writers corner, so.
I was wondering if anyone would be interested in reading & critiquing my novella? It's around 20,000 words. I can't pay you or anything (I have no money) so I totally understand if you don't want to! But there's only so much my mom will tell me because she's automatically biased ;) It's fantasy with a gold rush twist.
Short summary:
Del Fetler's set off to make his fortune... mining for gold on the floating, magical isle of Cumulus. Despite his best efforts, however, he's soon entangled in a magical adventure that may result in the death of everyone on the island. Can he join forces with two strangers to defeat a witch with no conscience and an evil plan?
Let me know if you want to read it, I can give it to you in word or pdf format... I'll just need your email (or maybe I can send it in a message? I'll see).
Hi! This is kind of a weird request, buuuuuuuuuuttt this is the writers corner, so.There's a little envelope next to the dA icon beneath my name. That should e-mail me. PM if you have trouble.
I was wondering if anyone would be interested in reading & critiquing my novella? It's around 20,000 words. I can't pay you or anything (I have no money) so I totally understand if you don't want to! But there's only so much my mom will tell me because she's automatically biased ;) It's fantasy with a gold rush twist.
Short summary:
Del Fetler's set off to make his fortune... mining for gold on the floating, magical isle of Cumulus. Despite his best efforts, however, he's soon entangled in a magical adventure that may result in the death of everyone on the island. Can he join forces with two strangers to defeat a witch with no conscience and an evil plan?
Let me know if you want to read it, I can give it to you in word or pdf format... I'll just need your email (or maybe I can send it in a message? I'll see).
So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
EDIT: See below for list of links.
2nd EDIT: As I said up top, you can respond by any means that are at your disposal, including but not limited to:
A post here (spoilered or unspoilered)
A comment on dA
A post on the Scriptorium
A Forum PM
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So here's a kind-of crazy idea that just started stewing in my head at random while I was out walking today: a world where once people have reached adulthood they don't actually start aging until they have children, and each subsequent child speeds up the aging process. I was vacillating on whether this would be more interesting if applied to everybody, or only to women/people capable of giving birth, with everybody else just aging normally.There are those who would say that they themselves didn't start aging until they became parents…
This is the sort of setting where I could see the story being either really interesting and thought-provoking, or horribly, disastrously wrong. Thoughts?
(Also, the Curse of Original Fiction strikes again.…and there are those who would dispute that last with great ardor (including me--though that may be why I write so slowly).
- Worldbuilding
- Characters
- Plot
You can only choose one. *headdesk*)
…and there are those who would dispute that last with great ardor (including me--though that may be why I write so slowly).
No no no, I was referring to my writing specifically. Which is probably why I've stuck mostly to fanfiction lately, because I can only ever seem to come up with one.Random thoughts…
Random thoughts…
It's probably why sequels/side stories are popular, because most of the work is done already. An example of my own is my most recent thing: it's a side story in my Big Future History of Everything, so the setting was already there, and I just had to plop the characters and plotline into it.
This leads to my next asinine idea: why not do each bit separately, and try them in various combinations until you find something that works? Like, create thirty worlds, thirty plots, and thirty sets of characters, and see if you can't get at least one full-fledged story out of them? And the settings, plots and characters that you don't use now can be picked up and dusted off once you find or make the other elements to fit--writing is patient that way. My Big Future History of Everything has been slowly evolving in my mind for maybe twenty years now, and will wait another twenty for me to use it.
Just me rambling a bit here.
Hmmmmmmmm... that actually is a thought. And I do have characters who've been around in my head since pretty much forever.
Having some music as inspiration also helps. I did find a bit for the empathy apocalypse - not enough for a whole story, but a few scenes at least. That's where a lot of my plots come from - I need music!
Pardon me, but I recently put two drafts of a short story I made recently into the Scriptorum, would it be wrong for me to ask for the two cents of the Writer's Corner on them, and possibly doing a repost of those two stories here just to help make that easier?Feedback (such as it is) sent.
So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
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Another gentle reminder...
So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
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You know that moment where you lose all confidence in your ability to tell stories? Yep. The second chapter of a new fanfic is just kicking my ass in every conceivable place and direction.I can't post pictures but I have one sent by a friend with a list. It's title is "The creative process" and it says :
You know that moment where you lose all confidence in your ability to tell stories? Yep. The second chapter of a new fanfic is just kicking my ass in every conceivable place and direction.
Oh, I do know this. For me, it usually comes about two-thirds into any story I'm writing. But trust me, if you power through that hard bit, you'll find that writing is suddenly fun again. O0
I'm finding a lot of this story challenging, mainly because I'm not quite sure which direction to take it in. I guess I'd better plan it more carefully
Aierdome, those are good ideas. I would add, the discussion among the characters as to what to do next can take many forms. You can phrase it as a straight-up discussion, an argument (which can also be an excuse for slipping in some exposition), a flashback, or even one of the characters being so worried about what to do as to have a nightmare about such a discussion. Or, if it's that kind of story, a dream or vision about it.
That's a bit of a good question really. I'm still trying to get a completely clear idea out of it myself.
All I really know is that one day while scrolling through images I got the idea of a turn-based game with three classes: a close ranged fighter, a ranged warrior, and a mage that would move around parts of the map for the other two.
Then I developed these three (http://imgur.com/L6XLu8v) to act as a member of each class, and then I added symbols on their backs to indicate ranks (where in reality they would be in those square patches of the opposite color). Then I started thinking of some other minor ideas that I've since melted down for this one, kinda.
I guess the big idea is something like this:
The terrain could be coastal, but it is certainly frozen. Tundra, forests, a couple mountains. In I think one of the tundras, there's this city. It's technology is mostly clockwork but with bits and pieces of technology of ranges just short of WW2 technology.
Everyone there worships this one god, a clockwork god. This god has given some of it's citizens gifts. For some, it manifests in magic, commonly this one that lets them move parts of the world about. Some get other magics, like the ability to spark up flames at their will. Some are given knowledge, the means to make some of this advanced technology as a second nature. There's even some who get multiple gifts. No matter what, these gifts come with a price. In many cases insomnia, but even if they don't have insomnia, the gifted will find that they can only dream of an endless mesh of gears, only sometimes expanding into other clockworks.
As you noticed, there's uniforms in both white and black. While I originally developed them to be warring factions, for some reason now I imagine them as just two rival militias for this city. Perhaps one focuses on defense, and one on offense, or maybe they both have ties to two older gods that fell out of favor due to their warring tendencies. Now I gave them a common enemy. Those creatures that you drew one of. They're tribal, they're hard to kill, they aren't fully understood, but they have attacked in the past, and this city attacks in return.
So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
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So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
EDIT: See below for list of links.
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…Any feedback is welcome.
I can't post pictures but I have one sent by a friend with a list. It's title is "The creative process" and it says :While I don't deny that this happens during the writing process. I'd like to take the opportunity to
1. This is awesome
2. This is tricky
3. This is s***
4. I am s***
5. This might be okay
6. This is awesome
And it repeats itself again and again during a creative process, for writing a story or something else. Don't give up ! You'll go back to more confidence and pleasure to write :)
While I don't deny that this happens during the writing process. I'd like to take the opportunity tobloviateput down my thoughts on the post-creative process, or my version of it.
There's a scene in the first Back to the Future where George McFly explains his reasoning for keeping his stories private: "Well, what if they didn't like them? What if they said they were no good?" It's an echo of what his son Marty had said about not submitting his music to the industry; it's also the nagging fear I have every time I put something up on the web.
I'm generally stuck on the 'This is awesome' stage of the process Mélusine described above, but I also know very well that my tastes are not shared by a large number of people out there; what I think is awesome is likely to be thought of as "bleh" by others. So every time I post anything, I'm biting my nails and sweating blood, waiting for the inevitable person who doesn't like my stuff and feels compelled to inform me about it to speak up (as such). And every time that I put something up and the crickets chirp, I'm convinced that it's because nobody likes it but they're too nice to actually say so.
So, is this a familiar state of affairs for anyone else?
How do I abandon a writing project? Is there an orphanage for them? Do I put it in a reed basket and send it on down the Nile of Obscurity? Just kind of confused as to how to get rid of one in general, like, considering this one had a teeny audience as well.
So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
EDIT: See below for list of links.
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So, apropos of... nothing, nothing really, does anyone else have that weird reaction to praise for an ongoing work where you get totally terrified of messing everything up with the next chapter and get kinda blocked because of that?
Just wondering.
So, recently I posted four stories chapter by chapter on the Scriptorium. Would anyone care to dissect them?
I mean that. I would be most grateful if any and all went through the stuff and sent me feedback by whatever means are at your disposal.
EDIT: See below for list of links.
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LooNEY_DAC, [...] I have always enjoyed reading your works, but seldom have anything to offer in return. Is saying "I enjoy your writing" enough to start with?
OPPONENTS: @JoB is likely to fill this role, challenging the writer on perceived points of error or weakness so that the writer can make the work stronger.
[...] Two points about the system as a whole:
- It seems to consider the fact that people can (and do) fill several of these roles as an invariant(?) characteristic of the (pair of) person(s). I would posit that it can change with time (as usual for personal relations, I suppose) as well as context (like I'm particularly likely to comment/oppose where the work in question dives into technological specifics).
[...] a single person can fill any or all of these roles in their feedback (possibly excepting Referents; I’ll explain why when we get there), either simultaneously or over time.Obviously I didn't make the bolded part clear enough; I thought that I'd said what you're saying here by saying that.
[...] Two points about the system as a whole:I never said they wouldn't; I'm only talking about the application to the creative process because that's what the book was about. The book itself was descriptive rather than prescriptive, insofar as I can tell: more like a "here's something interesting I've noticed and maybe knowing it'll help you" than a "this is what is and must always be!" As this is the "Writer's Corner", I thought I'd drop this in for people to mull over; thank you for mulling it over.
- Having that said, I'm not sure why these categories, however loose they may be in practice, would only apply to relations between writers ... (though I'm not at all a friend of stuffing everyone into drawers, Myers-Briggs style)