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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1245 on: December 23, 2015, 07:13:40 PM »
Puls3: Your story is good. Most of what needs work is grammar and construction of sentences, and that's fixable. The narrative voice is strong, which is the important part. Do you have someone you could ask to be a beta reader?

I agree with Seilann about sentence length. The use of short, choppy sentences works well for action sequences. It's how a person fighting for their life would speak, and adds realism to a scene.

A couple more things: I haven't written a huge amount of fiction myself, (thirty or so short stories) since I'm mostly a poet and technical writer, and most of what I've had actually published is science-fiction. However, there are a couple of techniques I have found useful:
. Write, then put it away for a day, a couple of days, a week - you'll soon work out how long is long enough for you. Read it again. Errors and things you could have explained better will jump out at you on a later reading. If it's something very complex, do it again.
. Read it aloud. Again, errors and infelicities of tone will jump out at you. This will let you tell if your voices for the characters ring true, as seeing the words on a page will not. One of the things I do in real life is storyteller, and I've found it a good rule of thumb that if a story wouldn't be effective if I were telling it to a bunch of people around a campfire, it won't be effective on the page.

Hope this is useful, and also hope you will tell us the rest of this tale soon - I'm eager to find out what happens next!
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1246 on: December 24, 2015, 11:20:06 AM »
So...this crazy/amazing fandom has inspired me to write my first fanfiction ever. (I blame the people in the art thread...all the amazing art for Sectoboss's Neighbor AU got me hooked, and I'm slowly working my way through this thread to find more). I'm obsessed with fond of Tuuri/Reynir, and since I haven't seen much written about them I decided to try my hand. It's a fluffy little thing inspired by the way they're sitting in the last panel on page 441.

So here it is.
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1247 on: December 24, 2015, 11:22:52 PM »
WOWEE SO MANY FICS

* LooNEY_DAC swallows nervously at all the new good stuff from everybody

* LooNEY_DAC puts the next bit of the Western up anyway

The Good, the Bad, and the Bestial
A “Stand Still. Stay Silent”/Western crossover fanfic
Part 16
Caper the Third: The Cave of Time
Part 5
Prior part
Spoiler: show
The Unseen Inferno

War: the winnowing of nations; the crucible of souls. War brought men together that they might rend each other to pieces.

War had always been the breeding ground of plague. Until the mid-20th Century, more deaths were always brought about by sepsis and plague than by the efforts of the enemy.

War was thus the perfect place to release a plague, and where better to release the ultimate plague than the ultimate war?

*
London, England
1 August, 1808

The man from the Foreign Office studied the massive Dane standing before him with such seeming placidity, his own doubts buried beneath a well-honed mask of aplomb. Hiring soldiers of fortune (against which practice Signor Machiavelli and others had so much to say) at all, and especially when these men of infamously loose morals and looser behavior were composed in large part of men from nations with which the Empire was formally at war, most decidedly went against the grain.

“I was expecting to meet with your captain,” the Foreign Office man remonstrated.

Mikkel almost smiled at that. “Oh, our captain is not one to be summoned by some desk-ridden monkey, however grand his desk may be, and this policy has delivered not merely the captain but our entire group from well-planned traps dressed up as job offers. You will hand me the details of our mission or their will be no mission.”

“Oh, devil take your impudence, man!” The Foreign Office man took a few deep breaths in order to restore his equanimity. “I must applaud your captain’s policy, though it would seem unwise to send such an undiplomatic emissary.”

Mikkel took the proffered envelope. “As to that, the simplest explanation is also the truth: I’m the only one who speaks English.”

*

Of course, Mikkel was lying. Tuuri had the diplo-speak of the orders sussed within a few minutes of study. “They want us to help the Spaniards in their uprisings against the French.”

“How much do they want our aid?” Sigrun asked with faux off-handedness. Of course, the other four were just as seemingly casual yet intent on the answer.

“Around 30,000 sterling, plus equipment and arms, it looks like,” Tuuri replied. “Though I think some of that’s meant to pay the Spaniards, too.”

“Eh, it’ll do.” And so the rest agreed.

*
Somewhere in Galicia, Spain
10 December, 1808

Starlight greeted the Western Six as they stepped out from the mouth of the Cave.

“Sooooo... where were we again, Tuuri?” Silence. “Mikkel?” More silence. “Does anyone have even the least clue as to where and when we’ve got to?”

“I see Orion,” Emil remarked.

“Whoop-de-doo.”

“You can only see Orion well during winter; by where it’s at in the sky, we’re still in the Northern Hemisphere, and it’s late fall-ish. Maybe December? But we’re north of the equator, at any rate.”

“And we’re finally in the lead,” Reynir added. “The Man in the Black Hat hasn’t reached here yet so we just have to stake this place out and we’ll get him.”

This, of course, was when the ambush happened.

*

“Why do I always end up on corpse disposal duty?” Emil asked in frustration. “We never burn ‘em, so why me?”

Sigrun shrugged. “You keep stumbling into the best dump sites.” She turned to Tuuri. “Any idea who they were yet?”

“All these papers are in French, and that’s one of my worst languages,” Tuuri explained. “It doesn’t help that they’re in bad French, either. From what I can make out, though, I think we’re somewhere in Spain, somewhere around 1808-ish, and there’s a war on.”

Mikkel groaned.

“What’s up?”

“There’s more like five wars going on, all muddled together under that jerk Napoleon Bonaparte. Wonderful. Only thing worse would be back in Virginny in the spring of ’65.”

Sigrun was looking decidedly happier at the implied prospects for carnage as Mikkel made his little speech.

“They might have thought that we’re Brits.” Everyone looked at Lalli, who continued, “Might be a problem in future. Brits keep sticking their noses in and making bad stuff worse, so keep getting everybody ticked off at ‘em.”

Lalli looked significantly at Tuuri, who mused, “We speak English, so they might think we’re Brits and hold us to account for whatever Brit idiocy’s in the wind. Great.”

“Are they likely to believe we’re ‘Yanquis’?” Sigrun asked.

“Only if they haven’t met us.”

The answer, delivered in Mikkel’s trademark dry drawl, startled them, especially Mikkel, who hadn’t said it. Heads and not a few six-guns turned in the direction the remark had come from...


Spoiler: Authorial Notes • show

Yeah, let’s just say Anglophilia wasn’t a thing in Middle America in the late 19th century (or Spain in late 1808, for that matter).

I debated having the first part become its own little series of adventures--”The Eide Traveling Mercenaries Players”, which would have allowed this stop to take up only one part, but I don’t think I could juggle that many continuing stories at once, as I’m having enough struggles with writer’s block as it is.

But I finally got this part out!!!!

YEEEEEESS \o/ I hope I didn't miss any installments from the two months I disappeared from the forum....

I'll just drop this here too, since it's from an AU that started here. What happens when somebody who doesn't write AUs jumps on the näkki-Lalli bandwagon? Well...

"Water and Eternity". 3k length. Characters: Emil and Lalli
Summary: Lalli is becoming something, transforming, changing. He knows this. He also knows that there is someone he must save, someone he must protect, even if doing so means hiding himself away.
Relationships: Lalli/Emil (mild and vague, but it's there)
Rating: 13+ for some canon-typical violence - it's on the mild side, but to be safe...
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CRYING
LOTS OF TEARS
I MEAN I'VE ALREADY SCREAMED ON TUMBLR IN THE TAGS BUT
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Uh, Yuuago, you're not helping me be less intimidated: your latest is too magnificent for that.

Oh, well.

So, here's this bit of fluff:
The Jylland Jump
A “Stand Still. Stay Silent”/“Jazz Age” crossover fanfic
Part 3
Prior part
Spoiler: show
Bing! Bing! Bing!

Downtown Copenhagen was even more bustling than usual today, last-minute shoppers rushing from store to store in more or less panicky efforts to find just the right gift before Christmas. Among them, Emil Västerström moved purposefully towards his goal.

His bandmates might have wondered at his going all the way to Copenhagen when Malmö offered so many shops of its own, but all those shops had failed him thus far. He was determined that he would succeed in the end, though, even if he had to go to London or Berlin!

The flophouse they were all rooming in had been almost empty when Emil found Lalli sneaking a listen on the big Victrola in the lobby.

“What’s that you’re listening to, Lalli?” The thin Finn was mostly blocking the phonograph’s speaker with his head, as their landlord had threatened the band more than once about keeping the volume down when they were in.

Lalli’s eyes were glowing when he replied, simply, “Bing.”


Ever since that moment, Emil had been working towards his goal: accumulate each and every one of Bing Crosby’s singles from this year into an album for Lalli, and now, only one remained for him to acquire: “Pennies from Heaven”, the single most sought after Bing single of 1936.

Malmö had failed him, but Copenhagen held out more hope; a friend of a friend of a friend of Sigrun’s had yielded up the name of a small, obscure little record store where you could find just about anything--for the right price. Emil was determined to get that single, even if it cost his last öre.

The crowds were almost impenetrable; it took so long to get anywhere that Emil began to worry that he’d miss his ferry, but once he turned down the alleyway that supposedly led to the store, the crowds melted away.

The store smelled more like a bookstore should than the record store it supposedly was, but that didn’t faze Emil. He searched tirelessly through the stacks of records for an eternity or two, until a soft cough at his elbow interrupted him.

“If you please, sir, we will be closing shortly. Is there anything I might help you find?” The speaker was a small, elderly man, either a senior clerk or possibly the shopkeeper himself.

Even after all these months of listening to Mikkel, Emil still heard far too much static whenever he heard Danish. Yet, he understood what the storekeeper was telling him well enough.

“I’m looking for the Bing Crosby single, ‘Pennies from Heaven’, if you would be so kind.” Emil tried to keep his impatience and growing desperation from his voice. After all, the man was simply doing his job.

“A Christmas gift, I see? And perhaps, to complete a set?” The old man nodded perspicaciously.

Emil essayed a sheepish smile. “You see quite well, sir. Does this mean you have a copy?”

“Oh, yes, young man. We have a copy over behind the counter, in fact.” They proceeded thither in silence. The old man reached below and pulled out a cardboard sleeve. “Yes, this is it, but I’m afraid it’s quite dear. So dear, in fact, that once they hear the price, none would buy it.”

Emil’s eyebrows rose. “How much?”

The old man quoted a figure that was just before exhausting Emil’s last öre. Emil swallowed hard, remembering the album with one empty sleeve hidden beneath his bed, and the glow in Lalli’s eyes as the Finn crouched by the phonograph.

“Wrap it up for me,” Emil said, the words running together in his haste to get them out before he could reconsider.

“If I might make a suggestion, sir?” Emil nodded. “Play the B side first.”

Emil nodded blankly again, and left with his precious cargo.

*

Lalli had been most mysterious about their gift exchange, telling Tuuri to tell Emil that he should meet Lalli at their secret firebug spot an hour after dark. Of course, this left Emil with the problem of finding a portable phonograph that played 78s instead of gramophone cylinders that he could bring along, which made him rather late.

When Emil finally arrived, though, he almost dropped what he was carrying. A grinning Lalli stood before a whole array of fireworks of every size and description, and all ready to be shot off over the sea. That, and the expression on Lalli’s face when he looked through the album, made it all worth it.

With his usual uncanny instinct, Lalli pulled out the disc Emil had spent so much to acquire. When he made to put it on the phonograph, though, Emil remembered what the shopkeeper had said.

“Play the B side first, Lalli.” Lalli shrugged, handed Emil the lighter to set to the first fireworks, and deftly set the B side playing.

To the (rather ironic) sound of Bing singing “Silent Night”, the two boys set off the greatest Christmas fireworks display in the history of Malmö.


Spoiler: Authorial Notes • show

This part A/K/A “Christmas Fluff”.

Of course, the annoying thing is that I wrote this between Seilann’s post justly praising Yuuago’s latest (“Water and Eternity”) and the time I posted this, whereas it took weeks for me to churn out the latest bit of the Western. Grrrrr.

Oh ho ho yes I live for Emilalli fluff :3

just 1 hour and 8 minutes before my personal deadline. I just hope that this story will end soon.

I just remembered that i didn't have a title for this thing, so lets call it....Panic? sounds good enough.
Quick note: The text in (cursive?) is supposed to represent inner monologue.
Spoiler: show
 Panic: Chapter 2
That scream, he would never forget that scream for as long as he lived. It was a sound of a dozen voices screaming in pain at once. Emil could do nothing but cover his ears in hopes that it would stop. He felt bony fingers burrow against his chest as Lalli pushed him away from the entrance and slammed the rotten door shut.
“RUUN!” he shouted in a desperate attempt to overvoice the deafening scream.
Emil didn’t need to understand what Lalli said, they both turned their backs away from the door and ran down the dark hallway where the rucksack full of books where located. Sigrun ran down the other side of the hallway for the staircase with a bunch of books under her left arm and a rifle tightly clutched on the other.
“What are you waiting for?! Grab the books and evacuate the building before the whole neighbourhood wakes up!” Emil grabbed the heavy rucksack and threw it behind his back before running for his dear life. 
As they ran down the staircase, towards the exit, Emil realised that the screaming abruptly stopped and the building became deadly silent. But other noises started to emerge in its absence, there where scratching noises behind the walls, tapping sounds from the floor above them moving quickly towards the staircase. They exited the building and rushed towards the cat-tank where Mikkel was standing with a broomstick in his hand, ready to fend of anything that would come his way with a face that was on high alert which instantly turned to pure fear when he saw what followed the search team. Emil noticed the fear on Mikkel’s and quickly turned his head in order to get a glimpse of what startled him. Was it the screamer of was it a giant? No, it was much worse than that, more dangerous than a giant could ever be. It was a swarm of trolls, pouring out of the building that they just evacuated from and there were more coming from the windows and cracks of other surrounding buildings, all attracted by the blood shilling scream that echoed through the streets of Copenhagen.
Their appearance was revolting; many were almost rotten to the core with little signs of ever being human like they were being taken straight from a nightmare. Instead of arms, some had scythe like limbs made of bone. Others had large jaws that seemed almost separated from the rest of the skull crawling at an incredible speed. But what were almost most disturbing that those corrupted creatures all had in common was their eyes; all sickly yellow that almost seemed to glow and was only made more visible with the dark clouds preventing any rays of sunlight from entering the realm of the infected.
The small crew ran as fast as they could despite the heavy load slowing them down, Emil started to hear them getting closer, the sound of claws scraping the ground and the screams of those who once lived started to get louder by the second. The calls for help to end the pain were all Emil started to hear by the time they started to enter the vehicle.
*
Mikkel was about to close the door when Emil was the last one to enter, but one of them managed to shove in its upper torso before the door was shut and was desperately trying to get in while flailing its scabby arms around to get hold of something to destroy.
Emil was in the corner next to the door, too shocked to move, his hands were shaking uncontrollably by the sudden rush of adrenaline that went through him. He only wished for the screams to stop and his wish came true, only to be replaced by a gunshot that rang through the tanks steel interior creating a high note that rang through his head continuously. He located the source of the painful sound at the business end of Sigrun's rifle, with a thin line of grey smoke escaping from the metallic pipe only to disappear in the air, something Emil felt like doing.
“Was that truly necessary?!” Mikkel shouted covering his ears while Sigrun was kicking off the red pulp that was once trying to get in.
“It was the fastest way; with that many heads, it would take too long to kill before its friends arri-“
Her sentence was cut short by a heavy slam on the side of the tank, following up with several bumps and scratching sounds of corrupt creatures impatiently wanting to break in and tear them all to pieces. The violent shaking of the tank caused Sigrun to stumble but managed to quickly regain her footing. Emil on the other hand wasn’t as lucky and fell sideways from the corner, the shock preventing him from regaining his balance while barely manage to cover his face with his hands as he hit the bloody steel surface. He looked up from his arm and it was chaos: Sigrun was loudly repeating to Mikkel her reasons for using a gun inside of a tank while Lalli was standing against the opposite corner from Emil, covering his ears with his eyes shut tight. He could hear the radar in the cockpit through the glass door that was dividing the tank, detecting numerous foreign objects within its proximity with several loud beeps. Reynir was standing with his back pressed against the wall hyperventilating by the horrific sight that was taking place through the windshield. Turri was facing them through the glass asking what the hell just happened with a panicked expression.
Emil could relate to Lalli in this situation, he also wanted to disappear into the abyss, forgetting everything that happened and pretending that it was all a dream. But alas, it was not. The cold floor and painful ringing in his head prevented him from having that luxury and all he could do was lay still, waiting for it all to end.

“SILENCE!” the inside of the tank obeyed that order which came from Mikkel who finally lost his patience. “Turri! take yourself and Reynir into the office and lock the door behind you, try to calm him down at the best of your abilities, do not come out unless I say so.” Turri did not want to object and gently escorted Reynir to the small office with tears streaming down his face “Reynir, it’s all going to be okay. Repeat after me: Inhale. count to four. Exhale.” A trick she learned from reading a first aid book they once obtained from one of their scavenging hunts. Reynir did his best to follow her instructions and started regain his normal breathing pattern, but the tears still flowed like an endless river down his cheeks.
“Emil! On your feet this instant!” Mikkel articulated with an authoritarian voice. Emil slowly got on his feet and did his best to not stumble over. Mikkel took one last sweep of the tank to see if something else needed to be corrected. “Now that everybody is calm, I think a quick getaway plan is in order, any suggestions Sigrun?” The captain was still baffled by the doctor’s sudden outburst but quickly regained her posture. “There are far too many of them for us to face. So I think we need to split up into two teams. Emil and Lalli will grab the deadlings attention and have them taken away as far away from the tank as possible, while I and Mikkel take down the remaining ones that happen to stay behind.” Emil didn’t believe what he just heard and managed to speak from his paralysed state. “Are you seriously saying that we should run out there and get ourselves killed?! Are you fu-“ Sigrun cut of Emil at mid-sentence. “It is our best and ONLY option” she said, looking Emil in the eyes. “Lalli knows the city better than any of us and you are the one who understands him best. I can’t leave and let Mikkel handle this all by himself and I’m not telling you to kill those troll as you are in no shape to fight ten of them a once. Using your flammable explosives will only put us at risk, by letting even more creatures know that we’re here and if that happens, we’re all as good as dead.” Emil was unable to speak “All I want you to do is run as fast as you can and loose them inside the city. Thirty minutes after the sun fall, I will shoot a flare and we will move about fifteen blocks west from the source as the blast and bright light is likely to attract some unwanted attention.”  It was silent and all that was heard was the constant electronic beeping from the radar. “Do you understand what you need to do?” Emil looked down, his right arm was smeared with blood from the floor, the shaking was starting to subdue. “Why did it all come to this?  Why?” He took a deep breath through the nostrils and looked up, eyes determined but behind them, it was trying to conceal complete panic. “I understand.” Mikkel nodded and told Turri to come out of the office to explain the plan to Lalli.
*
Time was on the essence. Emil and Lalli made themselves ready, they got some extra ammunition just in case and some purified water to keep them hydrated. Mikkel had his door on the handle and looked down on the two boys who were heading towards an unknown fate. “The moment I open up this door, all hell is going to break loose, are you ready for this?” Emil didn’t understand everything that was said but it didn’t really matter, all he could hear was the rapid heartbeat in his chest and the deep shaky breaths that he took to keep himself from fainting “Inhale. Count to four. Exhale.” An old trick he learned from boot camp, always worked during panicked situations. His heart slowed down as he took those deep breaths. He looked to his left and saw Lalli, expressionless as always with sky blue eyes that seemed more than ready. Emil then looked at Mikkel and nodded. “Good luck friends.” Felt more like a painful good bye than anything else.
And with that the doors was shoved open causing trolls in front of it to fall over. Lalli ran like the wind with Emil following his lead. Emil took his rifle and aimed for the sky. With a shaky finger he pulled the trigger, creating an explosive sound that echoed through the city of Copenhagen. A thousand hungry eyes were laid upon them.
“Why did it all come to this?”

Oh dear what a mess of a story this is. I really need to get into a writing club at some point in my life. I appreciate any form of criticism you may have, constructive or destructive is up to you. Goodnight and a marry Christmas to all of you.
Tip: put a space between your paragraphs; it's a lot harder to follow walls of text. X3 But it's really, really good! Can't wait for more!

So...this crazy/amazing fandom has inspired me to write my first fanfiction ever. (I blame the people in the art thread...all the amazing art for Sectoboss's Neighbor AU got me hooked, and I'm slowly working my way through this thread to find more). I'm obsessed with fond of Tuuri/Reynir, and since I haven't seen much written about them I decided to try my hand. It's a fluffy little thing inspired by the way they're sitting in the last panel on page 441.

So here it is.
I really don't ship these two, but this was cute c:
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1248 on: December 24, 2015, 11:47:39 PM »
Kiraly: that was nice!
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1249 on: December 25, 2015, 05:26:01 PM »
Seilann: Thanks for the tip, completely forgot storytelling 101 ^-^
The infected was pretty much copied from the dead space series. :P (never played it though, too gruesome for me  :-[ )

Róisín: Thank you for helping me see my grammatical mistakes. Don't really have a beta reader that could help me improve my story. Tried to get a few friends hooked on the comic, but it wasn't their cup of tea.

I've actually tried re-reading my fic a few hours after completion, just need to make sure that I'll be done a few days before the "deadline" in order to have more time to judge it.

misea: aaaaw, you so sweet X3
Sorry if it was difficult to read, will fix that when I have the time.  ^-^

Thank you all again for taking your time to read and comment on my little story.
As I said before, storytelling and writing has never been my strong suit, but I do look forward to finish this slightly chaotic adventure and to hopefully make it worthwhile reading.  :))
« Last Edit: December 25, 2015, 05:27:54 PM by Puls3 »
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1250 on: December 25, 2015, 09:32:52 PM »
Installment 5 of Pocket Fluff, which originated as a sort-of prompt about Emil being the big spoon: http://archiveofourown.org/works/5128250/chapters/12772100

I'm also taking emilalli prompts on tumblr as Seilannstar.


Seilann: Thanks for the tip, completely forgot storytelling 101 ^-^
The infected was pretty much copied from the dead space series. :P (never played it though, too gruesome for me  :-[ )

Róisín: Thank you for helping me see my grammatical mistakes. Don't really have a beta reader that could help me improve my story. Tried to get a few friends hooked on the comic, but it wasn't their cup of tea.

I've actually tried re-reading my fic a few hours after completion, just need to make sure that I'll be done a few days before the "deadline" in order to have more time to judge it.

If you don't mind it taking a few days, I could beta for you. :)
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1251 on: December 25, 2015, 10:18:36 PM »
I tried to resist. I tried to tell myself it was a bad idea. But I couldn't help it, once the notion entered my head it wouldn't leave me alone until I wrote it out and inflicted it on the world. I shall let you all decide on an appropriate punishment.

"The Currently Untitled Fanfic that Probably Doesn't Actually Deserve a Title"

Length: 1.7k
Characters: The Hotakainen family
Summary: What was Grandma Hotakainen's terrible mistake? What is looking for the Hotakainens? Why is every sentence in this summary in the form of a question?
Relationships: Just family stuff
Rating: No gore or adult situations. Apart from that, take your chances.

Located on my personal blog and including an intro for non SSSS folk - http://wyrmlog.wyrmworld.com/?p=7351

Edit: Meant to say that my Finnish is from Google Translate and therefore likely to be awful
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1252 on: December 26, 2015, 02:50:45 AM »
I tried to resist. I tried to tell myself it was a bad idea. But I couldn't help it, once the notion entered my head it wouldn't leave me alone until I wrote it out and inflicted it on the world. I shall let you all decide on an appropriate punishment.

"The Currently Untitled Fanfic that Probably Doesn't Actually Deserve a Title"

Length: 1.7k
Characters: The Hotakainen family
Summary: What was Grandma Hotakainen's terrible mistake? What is looking for the Hotakainens? Why is every sentence in this summary in the form of a question?
Relationships: Just family stuff
Rating: No gore or adult situations. Apart from that, take your chances.

Located on my personal blog and including an intro for non SSSS folk - http://wyrmlog.wyrmworld.com/?p=7351

Edit: Meant to say that my Finnish is from Google Translate and therefore likely to be awful

 :D haha!
Just finished it and that was great!
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1253 on: December 26, 2015, 05:14:24 AM »
:D haha!
Just finished it and that was great!

Thanks! Although I've realised that there are some timeline issues that I'll need to go back and revise.
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1254 on: December 26, 2015, 05:35:28 AM »
I tried to resist. I tried to tell myself it was a bad idea. But I couldn't help it, once the notion entered my head it wouldn't leave me alone until I wrote it out and inflicted it on the world. I shall let you all decide on an appropriate punishment.

"The Currently Untitled Fanfic that Probably Doesn't Actually Deserve a Title"

Length: 1.7k
Characters: The Hotakainen family
Summary: What was Grandma Hotakainen's terrible mistake? What is looking for the Hotakainens? Why is every sentence in this summary in the form of a question?
Relationships: Just family stuff
Rating: No gore or adult situations. Apart from that, take your chances.

Located on my personal blog and including an intro for non SSSS folk - http://wyrmlog.wyrmworld.com/?p=7351

Edit: Meant to say that my Finnish is from Google Translate and therefore likely to be awful

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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1255 on: December 26, 2015, 06:18:31 AM »

"The Currently Untitled Fanfic that Probably Doesn't Actually Deserve a Title"

I have that terrible song stuck in my head now. I don't know if I can forgive you for this.
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1256 on: December 26, 2015, 08:08:18 AM »
*hands a turkey shaped medal that says GET OUT*

I shall wear it with pride!

I have that terrible song stuck in my head now. I don't know if I can forgive you for this.

Well, consider how much worse it would be on a certain instrument! At least that's not stuck in your head :)
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1257 on: December 26, 2015, 08:33:33 AM »
So it's all your fault, is it? I had wondered why the seal! *Dissolves in helpless giggles*
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1258 on: December 26, 2015, 08:57:32 AM »
So it's all your fault, is it? I had wondered why the seal! *Dissolves in helpless giggles*

Well, the seal pic came first, the story second after some discussion in the headcannon thread. But yes, I'll accept the blame until Minna tells us otherwise :)
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Re: The SSSS Scriptorium
« Reply #1259 on: December 26, 2015, 11:13:19 AM »
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If you don't mind it taking a few days, I could beta for you. :)

Thank you for your kindness ^-^
It may take some time though. I don't want to be a burden to you by taking up your time reading and correcting a messy story :)
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